"【産卵あり】月曜が来て学校に行きたくないJKちゃん" by usotukiya from Pixiv Fanbox

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I just had another run through the new section. I like all the little extra bits of detail, particularly the bits in the room after Simon says to look for traps (it made me uneasy not finding anything) and the recurrence of Yarra's "guess who has two tits and isn't... " joke (Dammit Jim, I'm a succubus, not an archaeologist!). I think the new Zirantia Dungeon music is a big improvement over the previous track. It's a better fit for Zirantia's middle-Eastern feel, and it's much more subtle than the previous one but still appropriately eerie. The new track is in MP3 format, so it's got the same restart-after-battle issue as the Unforge. I also noticed there's a big silence at the end of the track. It doesn't sound bad this way, but I've gotten it to loop nicely and I think it's an improvement (as usual, this is done with LOOPSTART/LOOPLENGTH, so it won't loop properly in a normal audio player): <a href="https://www.dropbox.com/s/wjvpia2y4sfcfq3/Zirantian%20Dungeon%20looped.ogg?dl=0" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://www.dropbox.com/s/wjvpia2y4sfcfq3/Zirantian%20Dungeon%20looped.ogg?dl=0</a> If you'd rather retain the gap at the end, here's a straight conversion to .ogg which just solves the restart problem: <a href="https://www.dropbox.com/s/rcvmrj1zx468o98/Zirantian%20Dungeon.ogg?dl=0" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://www.dropbox.com/s/rcvmrj1zx468o98/Zirantian%20Dungeon.ogg?dl=0</a> I noticed a few more typoes on this run - not sure if they're new or I just missed them previously: "Designed to be use" -> "used": <a href="https://www.dropbox.com/s/92hiwf6wczccgae/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2012.34.55.png?dl=0" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://www.dropbox.com/s/92hiwf6wczccgae/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2012.34.55.png?dl=0</a> "I want to be both places" -> "I want to be in both places"? <a href="https://www.dropbox.com/s/0xtav9c4gykscli/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2011.14.20.png?dl=0" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://www.dropbox.com/s/0xtav9c4gykscli/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2011.14.20.png?dl=0</a> "I must ask your assistance" -> "I must ask for your assistance" or "I must request your assistance"? <a href="https://www.dropbox.com/s/8hhic9lvufk95l2/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2012.23.03.png?dl=0" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://www.dropbox.com/s/8hhic9lvufk95l2/Screenshot%202017-01-21%2012.23.03.png?dl=0</a>

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ナイスですねー