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I had the sketch for this page done by the end of last month, so didn't take too long to top it off. While it's supposed to end abruptly in an amusing way, my self-critical side has me hoping it doesn't come across as lazy, it's just how I had it intended since the beginning. 

The more predictable route would've taken a few more pages, maybe had her knot him, bigger finale, etc...but that's just been done so many times. I thought it would be rather funny to follow through with the 'interruption' lead-up. Hopefully it still flows nicely..? I can't exactly call a do-over, but hey, still new to this and wanting to try new stories. Just one more page!

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Kelanich Santovedis

I am not gay, but kinda disappointed that she didn't knot.

Big Tony

ahhh man..... Wanted the KNOT the tension and build was THERE.

SVKwolf

Gonna be rather long explanation, or he just might join them *wink wink :3

Conduitry

Haha I love everyone's eyes in the last panel. "... Hi Twix"

Bionet

The only concern I have regarding the narrative at this point is if only one page can meaningfully address Lia and Twix's new relationship without seeming too aprupt compared to the lead up. The interruption by Nytro at least seems to have a sufficient buildup given the people trying to access the room earlier on, and Nytro being called in on the previous page. I guess the big question is if time is spent on Nytro interacting with the two, or if there is an immediate cut to afterwards and the focus is kept on Lia and Twix. Also this page is pretty hot but that goes without saying at this point.

iceFox

Seeing a knot would've been noice, but the last panel is funny XD

Anonymous

Haha loved the comic, glad you went against the grain in the end.

Heretic Morgan

"Hi Twix" Like he didn't just walk in on his friend completely undressed with a chick.

Spartan277

The cutting short of it is fine with (and funny to) me, this comic was never really my thing in the first place.

Riverweasel

Being that this is Nytro, I don't think he'd need an explanation at all. He'd probably just be peeved that they didn't check room reservations first.

FluffKevlar

It just cuts to Lia Twix; skips ahead a few minutes. They chat for a little and leave on a good note. I, personally, think it works, but I'll try to finalize the sketch and post it soon to let others see it too. Thanks!

Anonymous

"Why are you naked?" "Who is that chick?" "Why is there cum leaking out your ass?" ... oh ... Oh ... OH ... O.o