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Cross Contamination Part 12 (Patreon)

Published:
2024-10-22 22:56:17
Edited:
2024-10-23 00:49:22
Imported:
2026-06

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Good evening everyone!

I'm pleased to present the rough draft of Cross Contamination part 12: Business and Pleasure! It felt good to get back into the series. This draft might be pretty rough when it comes to typos, so be merciful!

As always, I am absolutely starving for feedback and critique. Was any part boring? Hard to understand? Were there any scenes that you though could have gone further, or tweaks that you think would have made it hotter? I would love to hear about it!

I also love to hear positive feedback of course! Were there any parts you loved or found particularly hot? Hearing about it helps me to know to include more stuff like that in the future!

You can comment feedback below, or email me at grogstoopid32@gmail.com if you have more detailed feedback you would like to give. Thanks!

In my own notes, I do think I might have repeated myself a bit too much when exploring Gina's mental state. I'll be looking to slim things down a little in the edit.

This chapter was Gina heavy, but chapter thirteen is planned to be Cassie heavy, focusing on her cheerleader initiation.

I hope you enjoy the read.

Comments

Abgazil

Loved it as usual, the wait for Chapter 13 is going to be hard indeed. I really liked the way you resolved the office storyline. I was a bit apprehensive that Gina was being set up for long term relationships with Frank and Xavier, who I find much less compelling than Victor. But I loved how they ended up just being tools for Victor to continue undermining Gina's sense of self. The one thing that didn't work as well for me is the 'She will serve' website having nothing to do with Victor. Maybe this is just another one of his ruses and it actually is his site, but I found it stretching the bounds of plausibility for me that there are *two* totally unrelated men turning women into sluts for the fun of it. Victor is presented as being basically the perfect man and a genius manipulator, so it makes sense that women fall for his tricks. If any man is able to do it it somewhat undermines the premise for me that these were strong women to begin with. I also felt it could have been a great opportunity to show Gina more of Victor's past conquests and draw an even more direct parallel to what awaits her.

Rabblelaid's Stories

Thanks! I see what you mean about "She Will Serve". I agree that it does diminish Victor's skills a little if just anybody can corrupt women like that. The reason I hesistated to make the website Victor's is that I was worried that it might cheapen him a little. If it turns out that he is just a guy who runs a porn site... Maybe the site takes user submissions and the most popular submissions that seem like the most dramatic corruptions are submitted by a buff black man with his face blurred out. I'll give it some thought!

Abgazil

Having him make submissions seems like a great idea. On the other hand, while I totally see your point about not having Victor be just a guy running a porn site, but having him use it to publicly shaming his conquests wouldn't diminish him to me. It could add to his duplicity in pretending to be a confidant to his victims even as he's humiliating them publicly. Also, in either option, if Victor's conquests are on the site then one idea would be for him or Rene to send links to Daren, maybe even making him pay for access. That's an old trope but a good one imo!

Pavel Vybíral

Gina's becoming a bit of a sex robot. Humiliate me a little and suck you off, humiliate me more and spread my legs. It's just so dehumanizing. I don't know if 100-0 wins are that fun. Maybe 51 to 49 is more appealing.

Rabblelaid's Stories

I can definitely see what you mean. A big part of Gina’s character is that she isn't a weakwilled pushover. But another big part of her character arc is that her resistance is slowly crumbling away, so she will tend towards being more sexually submissive over time. Also, a big part of her corruption is that she us fiercely competitive,but just can't seem to win against Victor. I will keep an eye out for opportunities to show more resistance on her part.

Pavel Vybíral

I understand, of course. I'll add that I love your stories. So just take this as a little note. It's just that sometimes the humiliation of women gets over my head 😆. But other than that, I commend you, great read. And thank you for the response.

Rabblelaid's Stories

Thank you for taking the time to comment! Cross Contamination is definitely one of my hardest humiliation stories, so I understand if it goes too far for you! I hope my next story is right in the sweet spot for you.

Jeto

Hi, is this story gonna have a full tragic ending for the family when it ends?

Rabblelaid's Stories

I don't want to spoil too much, but I did write a beginning of the series that I don't envision this story having a happy ending, and I haven't moved off of that.

Andy

I think there should be more examples from the she will serve website, just as a matter of storytelling and the rule of threes. Reading it felt like there was something missing.

Andy

Good story otherwise - hopefully that didn’t come across as harsh!

Rabblelaid's Stories

Hey, no worries! Sorry for not responding sooner. I can definitely see where you're coming from. I considered the same thing that you suggested, but in the end I was worried about pacing. I thought that if I lingered too wrong on stories from the website, it might distract from the story at hand. I definitely could have been wrong on that call though!

Nylav

I read the chapter published to Literotica. As always, another excellent entry in the series! I don't have any critiques exactly, I just want to give positive feedback. Something I really liked about chapter 12 was that the Harlowes are starting to demean and expose themselves with hardly any outside influence, driven by the strength of their sexual need and kinks. Yet, it is clear that the Crosses are still many steps ahead, directing the games being played. In a way, it kind of softens the tone of the story for the "victims" to derive enjoyment even as their circumstances get more and more twisted, and to feel that they are "accepting who they've always been". I like that the manipulation games have expanded to include more characters as pawns for the Crosses (Cassies ex-friends, Gina's ex-coworkers), it increases the opportunities for manipulative scenarios. Especially now that Gina recognizes she is not just addicted to Victor, but sexual humiliation from anyone whose eye she catches. As far as pacing, I feel like this chapter was crafted really well considering the two story lines. Gina went through significant character development and change, and it feels like her arc of holding onto her self-importance came to a satisfying point, leaving anticipation for what Victor has planned for her next stage, now that her career is ruined. Meanwhile, Cassie is in the middle of her arc of rebellion against Renee. The threats of Charlie's influence and the cheer initiation are very promising. And as far as Daren, I like that he is being not just toyed with, but corrupted as well. Originally he was the pitiful, perhaps sympathetic cuck. But Renee has twisted him up so much that he is now a willing accomplice to Cassie's debasement. One thing I'm interested to see how you handle is the relationship between Cassie and Gina. They have started to notice each other's sexuality, without each being aware that the other is being manipulated. I wonder how Gina would react to learning Victor cosigned the exploitation of her daughter, or learning that her daughter might well have inherited her natural submissive nature, pointing to it being an intrinsic characteristic. I wonder how Cassie will react to her image of her mother as a strong, indomitable (and heterosexual/monogamous) woman shattered. I wonder if the two women will hook up before learning the truth, or if they will learn the truth and then be helpless to hooking up anyway. Anyway, a lot to look forward to!

Rabblelaid's Stories

Wow, I could inject detailed positive feedback like this directly into my veins! Sometimes it can feel a little thankless to write Cross Contamination, because the series tends to get a lot fewer views than some of my other stories. But I do love that there are a lot of big, big fans of the series.

Nylav

I imagine any author faces diminishing clicks on a lengthy series like this. Hopefully your own interest and the support of the dedicated is enough to keep you going to the end, because it's an excellent story. I'm continually impressed with the creativity of your ideas and the level of planning evident in the interconnectivity of your plotlines. Not to mention the top notch writing style (which goes for all your stories). I hope this series goes on much longer.

Valentina Coxs World

You probably have no idea just how many of us are addicted to this series. Please write more !!!!’