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Chapter 03 of Broken Dreams is out! (Patreon)

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2025-07-14 17:55:18
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2026-06
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A part of me is tempted to rename the fic to 'Shifting Fate' again, but it feels like too much of a hassle. Anyway, a normal-sized chapter.A lot of things happen. Do let me know what you think in the comments below.

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Disclaimer: This is a work of fiction based on the ASOIAF universe. All recognisable characters, plots, and settings are the exclusive property of GRRM; I make no claim to ownership. Edited by: Bubl3oka ??? The Betrayed Lord Commander He woke up enveloped in a cool, pleasant sensation. The terr...

Comments

MehOhWell

I, for one, sincerely hope Jon can reclaim (not)Longclaw as in the previous story. Because magic swords truly do add to his utter bullshit and general mystique. At the very least I wouldn't mind him chancing upon Dark Sister as a replacement. I also look forward to however he ends up down south. Because at least with No Joy in Command there was a semi-predictable route to lead him to meeting the Targs. Here? I got no idea where things are going to go. Also, shoutout to the Unlikely. Truly a decent man surrounded by categorical fuck-ups. Both of his own leniency and because the average westerosi lord has LITERALLY no imagination or ambition beyond binding themself to a bigger chair.

Maurogatos

I like the chapter … but I feel like you should end with Jon , put him in the world, end his backstory and then saw us every other character like rhaela , aegon, the stark etc.etc. Before you go again to Jon I don’t know , feels like all going extra slow !

stevem1

I enjoyed the chapter. Jon is stubborn, and apparently not entirely human any more. Dealing with the Other plot line early on was well done as they usually don’t add much to a story. It occurs to me that Brynden Rivers was born 175 AC and sent to the Wall 133 AC. Jon likely bears more than a passing resemblance. It would be very easy for him to be mistaken as Bloodraven’s son. He’s the right age. I do feel for Aegon. Even if half of his problems he created himself and the other half come from bad advice or spoiled kids. If he had focused his reforms on the Crownlands, and then acted to make the Crownlands as prosperous as possible, thereby increasing his political, economic and military power, he could have solved the problems over the long term. Much like the cities stripped labor from the landed lords IRL, he could have done the same without lifting a finger other than seeing to his own lands. Other lords would have had to follow suit or risk being undermined. If he needs counsel, he should recall Maester Aemon. The man was knowledgeable and wise. Who cares if he provides his advice wearing Black? And the first words out of his mouth would be, “Kill the boy and let the man be born.” The second would be, “Love is the death of duty.” He might get Egg back on track with just those two statements. He has any easy solution for some of his woes. Nothing unites like a common enemy. Exaggerate the threat of Maelys and unite the lords in casting him down. Repeat as necessary with pirates, etc... For example, give Arryn what he wants and unite against the threat of the mountain clans in the Vale. Offer honors in lieu of material awards. And in the meantime humble those lords who seek to make demands on the Crown. Make Arryn regret inviting the king into his home. Regardless, I’m looking forward to more.

eternalknight219

So...I noticed lots of whispers from Old Gods in Warcraft. Nice touch.

Porthos

It's still like a prologue...

Patrick Perrault

Very intriguing. No Others to deal with upends the board. Jon's new condition is interesting. I bet he meets Bloodraven soon.

FallenMetalGod

Thank you. It seems like the black stone is active. I am curious if the Bloodstone Emperor's spirit is haunting Jon or the rocks themselves. Jon handles things well, but he lost his sword. I do hope that he will have a strong connection with the Old Gods because of what Rhaella did for him. I can't wait for him to see that he's in the past once he reaches the Wall. It seems like Aegon the Unlikely is still dealing with issues of court, but a big problem just show up which is never good. I do hope Jon and Aemon have a good conversation. I always enjoyed it whenever those two got a moment to speak to one another. Great job as always, and I hope Jon gets a new sword, something legendary, soon.

Ripe

Dealing with Cold Ones, White Walkers or whatever you call them before they become a problem is certainly interesting idea, one I don't think I saw before... But now I wonder what will the main conflict of the story be... hopefully not all the pointless politicking in the South because that never really mattered. Despite what idiot TV writers believed, conflict in the North was always the central and most important part of the ASOIAF. That said, the mention of a "sunken city" and hints of Jon needing to go there certainly have a promise of an interesting story since the only sunken city I can think of is Valyria!

Cinema Man

Jon Otherbane 3 for 3 stories where dis man has committed Fae genocide with Ballad being free-farming kills truly Giga-Chad.

Rodrigus

Thanks for the chapter!

UponAPaleHorse45

Honestly love the idea that Jon just took advantage of the situation and ganked the others by circumstance. And right at the beginning too.

Bovragor

Loved the Stronghold reference! The Cthulhuesque whispers and questions to one's sanity are also very nice!

Rhett Sellers

Hmmm. This hasnt really grabbed me yet.