Oni and the Farmer Ch. 13 (Patreon)

No I have not been working on this all week! 

I'm about 11 pages into Chapter 14 so far but as I saw that I wouldn't likely make my pseudo-deadline of Saturday I wanted to make sure you got the improved version of Ch 13 at the very least and so have spent the last couple of days editing and proofing.

I would love to tell you that this won't happen again but there's always a possibility. For my sanity i hope these types of issues are few and far between. Now i feel like i'm behind and need to catch up.

I did end up making a couple of major changes, the chase scene got completely rewritten and i'm far happier with the new one and the scene where Kal brings back Aradelle's eye and subsequent dialog was replaced, I kept reading it wondering 'what the hell was I thinking, I didnt think that it was poorly written, just completely pointless and added nothing to the scene, in fact I think it hurt the tempo of that section more than anything.

For those of you who want to go over the revised Ch 13 please do, if not I don't believe it will hurt anything going forward. Either way it's time for me to get back to working on chapter 14. :D

Again my sincerest apologies

Blu