Update and Re-up of Chapter 21 (Patreon)

Update:

23 is done, but not ready yet. It is also my longest chapter to date coming in at 30 pages or 14,000+ words!

Wow... that didn't make much sense. Done but not ready... that would mean it isn't done, right?

Basically what I'm saying is that the main writing is done but I made some changes later in the chapter which I need to go back and reconcile with earlier descriptions and actions. Once that is done and I've run it through Grammarly I'll be sending it off to the editors, probably some time tomorrow.

In light of the next section of this post I'm really happy with the overall feel of this chapter and I think you are going to enjoy it quite a bit as well.

Re-up:

Submitted Chapter 21 to Literotica on Wednesday, forgot to hit the "Submit for Publication" button until Thursday. Took another look at Chapter 21 Friday as I prepared to put it up on the other free sites and went ... ugh. 

I've now spent most of the day doing revisions. Sentence structure, using better vocabulary, getting rid of excessive words, rearranging for better flow, etc. 

I also toned back the new peeps accents a bit since I did a piss-poor job of carrying them through the next chapters. 2muchdiggity even mentioned that to me that I need to try being more consistent in that area so I have none to blame but myself. 

Since the revised version is going up on the free sites I'm posting the improved chapters here as well.

For my Literotica followers I'm making this a public post here since submitting the updated version today means it will be another three days before it posts whereas Wattpad and SOL are already up. Just remember to head back to Lit and vote once it posts please!

TTFN!

-Blu