Demo update (Patreon)

Hey there, everyone!

Is everyone having a good day? Hope so, if not, I hope this demo update will make it a little better, even if there's not much.

This update includes a heavy corrections after catching aaaaaaaall the typos. I wasn't aware there would be so many... but yeah, had to deal with them and fix some pronoun issues too in some routes, like the doc. If I didn't catch them all, please do tell me and I'll fix them. Most of the time the problem comes from how I wrote it. For example: Athiel uses she/her here and L uses he/his, and sometimes, I accidentally write $l_they/$l_them for Athiel when it should be $a_they/$a_them, same for the gender, etc.

But let's focus back to the rewrite. So this time there's not much added, as I mentioned before (I think?), that I wouldn't change much except for things that really need it so we can go back to chap 4 faster. V-poly choices have been added, some text removed or modified, but mostly, grammar corrections have been the biggest change here.

I wanted to cut the work problem scene in chap 2, but I really need to keep it there to build the plot. So I just removed the part where MC handles the crowd, which is, in a way, the most logical thing. I don't know much except what google and my close ones told me about anything to know about a company etc., but having the main person directing the company handling something that big makes more sense than an assistant. And it felt too charged and heavy with what MC already deal with. I think that was a good compromise, keeping the scene where Marla Paxton, the client, comes and complains about the cosmetics, plus the crowd, without overly making a big deal out of it for MC.

The demo update ends when the therapist shows up at MC's work.

Sorry, it's getting long, but one final thing I wanted to say is that I'm about ~8k words for chap 4! (So will probably be around 10k tomorrow if I write my usual 2k words tonight). I decided to split my time in two parts only recently: rewrite in the mornings and chap 4 during late afternoon/evenings. And I'm finally breathing, I really needed to find a way to get to chap 4 without neglecting the rewrite, which I feel is turning more into a big fat corrections than a rewrite at this point, but it's also needed for the vee-poly routes (especially for Ekissa/MC/T route), and it's also needed to remove some things which might be irrelevant, so I can't exactly stop the process.

That's it. I'm done haha. Have an extraordinary day/afternoon/evening, and please enjoy what little I have to offer for now!

Early Access demo link: here