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The Reaver's Legacy - The Offer (Patreon)

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2023-10-08 13:00:05
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2026-06
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More fighting is coming...

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Abhishek Kumar

The offering felt really weird to me, especially because it touched upon so many tropes and cliches that we find in HP fanfictions. Also, the story is starting to, just a little bit, get too long for me. I'll still finish it, of course, but I'm not feeling as excited now, the plot feels more episodic to me, bad guy sends villains, good guys save the day, filler, bad guy upgrade, good guy upgrade, repeat. Honestly, the subplots involving Malfoys and Jr felt most interesting to me this chapter.

Sal

I really hope you don’t have him be with Isabella nott. And yea I agree with another poster, that the story is getting prolonged for no reason. The battles are a little boring and these death eaters getting more powerful was a little dumb. Can understand Voldemort getting powerful by a dumb ritual, but having his death eaters get suped up. Defeats the purpose of aurors and the order if they can’t do anything to these death eater, giants, or werewolves.

Lord Peverell

It sounded very strange for a pureblood lady like Isabella offer herself like this to Harry !! Knowing Harry he will want to do it the proper way...fall in love, get married and have kids...Isabella sounds very desperate.. really hope Harry ends up with someone he loves with and doesn't take any hasty decisions... rooting for Harry and Daphne !!

AlexanderR

The relationship that Harry has developed with the whole Nott family seems forced, odd. I guess a lot of this is happening 'off-camera' because he's visiting them frequently. But it just seems weird how familiar they are with each other. It may simply be a matter of how many characters are involved in this story, how many of them Harry has had friendly relationships with, and the focus on the Nott's now. I don't care who Harry ends up with, whichever feels most organic would be good, or no one at all is fine. But he's thinking about it too often. We don't need to know why he thinks one relationship won't work or another, that feels less natural. I'm really hoping all the Malfoys die a horrible death in this story. But that's pretty much every story. That issue of him having an heir, but not marrying the mother, marrying someone else, and them being upset that he already has an heir should've occurred to Harry before Daphne brought it up lol. Seems like we're just about at the end of the visions of past Peverells/Potters.

Err hello

Offering was off. But I still like the Nott arc. Excited to see which you pick.

Zai

Voldemort inadvertently targeting what Harry cares for is getting old. Like, why would he send Barty away to get Nott when Nott is ultimately inconsequential and Barty could be doing more useful things. It just makes it feel like you're trying to force another tragedy onto Harry. I also agree with the other commentors that all this action is getting a bit stretched out. Nevertheless, I am enjoying the romance and the slice-of-lifeish parts of the story and can't wait to see in what direction you take it.

Sunny

Personally, I don't think the story is getting longed out. Admittedly, some of Harry's 6th yr wasn't a thrilling read, but since the Hogsmede battle, I think the story has picked up massively and is looking to finish up strong. Also, it does kinda make sense for Harry and the Notts, specifically the mum and Isabella, to be familiar considering Harry & Isabella pretty much spent a whole summer together and her Mum basically patched him up from significant injuries. I think that would bring people closer. Also, the fact that Isabella is pure blood makes what she said even more sense, as she understands the need for a family line to continue and she feels clearly that Harry saving their family warrants that. Plus it wasn't like she was throwing herself on top of him and the Wizarding world is a tad - respectfully of course - backwards, so culturally it makes sense too. Re the suped-up Death Eaters, I think this was a good idea, as it reintroduced ritual magic and raised the stakes higher, i.e. making the foot soldiers harder to beat and showed a consequence of Harry's actions, cause Voldemort wouldn't have done the ritual if Harry didn't fry their brains. Anyway, thank you for the chapter Mr McCusker and I look forward to the next one.

Snewp

While this story is as high quality as your previous ones, I truly think you need to leave stories involving Harry vs Voldemort behind for awhile. It’s just hard to make a conflict that we have seen you write multiple times interesting and new. That’s why your Harry vs Grindelwald story was exceptional, it was a novel concept as far as your own stories go. I do hope you consider making your ASOIAF story your next main story, and if that isn’t feasible, then Avalon needs to be your next choice. I know the Harry/Amelia story won the poll, but I think that would be a mistake if it is just going to be a rehash of Harry vs Voldemort.

omiguh

I’m kind of losing interest in the story. Haven’t read this chapter yet, but I’m not as excited for it. Harry doesn’t really even seem close to matching Voldemort. It almost seems he plateaud a little after the fourth year which is kind of sad because he should have been getting much closer and then with the wand…he should be right there, maybe a little worse but giants shouldn’t really be a problem nor any death eaters.

omiguh

Also, I’m not really liking the romance at all. I think killing Katie was a mistake. You have been splitting his time with Gabrielle, daphne and Isabella and I could really care less about any of them. I feel no connection. Gabrielle is the only one that doesn’t feel so forced but she has barely been in the story recently so that’s probably why