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Early Chapter 17: Maguire Incorporated (Patreon)

Published:
2019-03-27 17:00:25
Edited:
2019-04-03 04:21:20
Imported:
2026-06
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New chapter. Thanks to everyone who has enjoyed this story so far!

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(This chapter has moved to RoyalRoad.)

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The Golden Core plot thread was meant to be a subversion of the usual expectation that the MC will receive a special unique bonus. Most likely it's going to get some serious hate, but I hope some people enjoy it.

Comments

striderfighter

Well....you set up a potential new protagonist...you showed how high the heavens are...

Zeal Iskander

> The Golden Core plot thread was meant to be a subversion of the usual expectation that the MC will receive a special unique bonus. No such thing as a free lunch, eh.. well, our --unfortunate-- protagonist is honestly interesting enough without you needing to hand him these kinda things. PS : if I were you, I'd just remove the "Most likely it's going to get some serious hate, but I hope some people enjoy it". You're the author here, you don't really need to justify yourself, and usually people like being surprised, so I doubt people are really going to throw hate over that. Plus, now, the CEO knows him, that's """good"", right? Ha ha ha... hah. :/

Alexander Dupree

I like that it didn't go the normal route. If you want you can turn this into a rational fiction but you'd need to clean up the evil lawyer from the inheritance hearing. He's just too randomly evil.

Cameron C

As long as these pay out later, I think the chapters fine - good even. There’s good conflict right at the end which makes it interesting to drive the story forward

NorkNork

As a lawyer, I don't find the lawyer all that evil. Just doing his job, following the law. Hell, I'd probably read a series about lucrim lawyers. I will license that idea for one plate of nachos.

NorkNork

>The Golden Core plot thread was meant to be a subversion of the usual expectation that the MC will receive a special unique bonus. Well it worked. I was suprised and I appreciate the novelty.

sarahlin

Ah, that statement was more expectations for the future than expecting hate from people here, but I see what you're saying.

sarahlin

Rational fiction as in r/rational? I have some connections to the community, but can't claim to be too deep into it. In any case, I did indeed intend the lawyer to be simply following the law.

Alexander Dupree

OK cool. I'll reread the section with that in mind.

Runcible Technician

At last I see his true strength. He's still a decent dude despite living in a world filled with raging assholes.

Dragon723

One of the most realistic and interesting outcomes :)

Dragon723

One or two raging assholes by my count. Both of whom saw themselves as having been humilated. were in fact humiliated just not by mc.

Mathew B Andresen

I recently Tried reading 10 realms but I'm enjoying this so much more. I love it that the MC has to struggle a bit and everything is not just handed to him. I don't want to read a book where there's a I win button

sarahlin

Thank you! I also think some difficult struggle makes things better, so I'm glad to hear there are people who agree.

Runcible Technician

The lawyer, Granny, his uncle, his parents, Micheal, the corporate stooge, the arena thug. Thats a lot of bad people for 17 parts. Normal Wuxia has less jerks than this and thats saying something.

Mathew B Andresen

Is Granny really a asshole? She does have other motives, but I do think she's helped as well