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Ricky takes charge!Tony feels a bit left out of the conversation, though he hasn't put anything together yet. I like how Freddy can't help but stare at Ricky's arms... I think papa bear has a weaknessThat last bit of text from Freddy might have to move onto the next page... it doesn't flow well visually with the rest of the dialogue imo! Let me know your thoughts

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Ozzan

I was about to comment on that little detail of Freddy’s stare, it’s perfect haha. Also I don’t know what the next page looks like so it may make sense to move the line there if it improves the flow like you said. But if you can’t, I personally don’ think it hurts the visual flow all that much :) I was gonna make a different suggestion, I hope I’m not stepping out of line. But I think that Tony’s “—OOF!!” bubble would read better if the “spikes” of the bubble were inverted. I confused the balloon tail as part of the spikes that appear on the left, so it might help having those at the bottom instead.