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Chapter VI

Definitely going to see some differences in this chapter from previous versions! Some of it's how the magic is explained/seen via Alan, one pretty large worldbuilding change, and some timeline changes. I don't think this story will ever be as lean as the first draft, but I am trying to make it more efficiently paced!

There are also a ton of non-English sentences here, so the translations document has been updated. It's super nerdy!

This is also the last chapter before these will start being members-only. Free! But members only, no tier--just a member. I decided not to $1 tier lock it, but the next book will be. Again, it's because of the fucking bots who are probably AI scrapers.

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uno

holy fuck there was absolutely nothing wrong with how the last drafts intro'd the gais(?) but goddamn is this way better, i love this so much. my only complaint is that i got really hype thinking my boy (who shall not be named) was back when the entities first got riled, but i think it makes more narrative sense this way and i'm just too impatient to see him again (i miss that piece of shit so much)

Teromain

yeah this is one of the biggest changes to the entire story, not just how it looks (which has already clearly changed here) but also some other major stuff that affects all the worldbuilding everywhere! Pretty big changes, but they make more sense, and tbh the og version was a little too HPish - there was a point to it, but one of those things that Didn't Work Well after all

Atlanas E. Kildarin

Ooooh so I may have misinterpreted this, but did the stasis spells Alan is holding almost take effect on him? It feels like the one who should not be named was coaxing them up.

Teromain

I'd say that's definitely not a far-fetched way to read it! Not a lot of stability going on in him at the moment~