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Blue Water Chapters 1-4 (Patreon)

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2021-01-10 19:32:46
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2026-06
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This is something that I have been working on for some time but the plot line has got tangled and it has stopped mid-stream.  This is where I need help from my patrons and hope that they can help me with the creative process.  There will be ongoing murder in this story, and (as with most of my stories) the brothers will find their future as sisters.  But where could this go?

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Eva

I know I'm almost three years late to this, but it's a new read to me and it's an interesting setup. Did you ever get around to finish the story, if so is it published somewhere? Thanks. :)

Maryanne Peters

Actually, this is my only unfinished story here, and I posted it in the hope that I can get some direction. This is a bugbear for me, but I just keep writing! MP

Eva

Ooh, so you're open to ideas then? If you don't mind some input I'd love to share some ideas as to how I'd like to see the story go from here. My idea probably makes for a longer story than you initially intended, but here goes: First off, the story is a bit messy, with all due respect. At the end of chapter 3 Lucie throws herself off the boat and is thought to have committed suicide, although that’s left open. That means she can’t stay with Harry in chapter 4 and two crew members would have to be reported lost at the sea. But they aren’t reported missing in Tahiti, and the boat left Tahiti quickly after the PI inquires about Lucie and Neve. So Jonas and the main character (MC) are persuaded to pretend to be Lucie and Neve for a short time. It takes about a week to sail from Tahiti to Samoa and the boys are prepared in this time. Mandy was always friendly with the boys after they kept her safe from Harry and Mal, so she gladly helps the boys with their transformation. Initially the idea is for the boys to look like the girls from a distance and merely wave to the PI, but it’s Mandy who says they have to be prepared for closer inspection. Mandy is kind and she hits it off with Jonas really well, Kyra takes special care of the main characters transformation. Both girls help the boys with getting rid of bodyhair and working on their eyebrows. Jonas slowly falls for Mandy, so he’s very willing to spend more time with her as Lucie as she feminises him. This means the main character (Neve) is spending more time with Kyra, who ensures the MC that he doesn’t fall for Mal as she wants Mal all for herself. She reveals that’s why she killed Neve in the first place, because she dared have sex with her man. It turns out Neve is bisexual, which helps the main character get more into character. As time passes, the boys slowly transition mentally into their female characters. Where they start being reluctant to do their makeup, they now enjoy applying some mascara and lipgloss to feminise them. In order to sell their story they start wearing a bikini and doing some sunbathing to get some bikini tan lines. Mandy says Jonas looks cute and kisses him. The tan lines mean they have to do some sunbathing, leaving them with less time to do their work. Since Mal has Kyra for a sex partner, Harry becomes more frustrated as it’s clear Mandy contributes enough to not have to pay for her fare with sex. But he can’t demand the boys to give him sex as they’re doing their thing to keep the authorities at bay. The first thing they do when boarding in Samoa is go to a hairdresser to add some length to their hair, leaving them with hair long enough to just fall below their nipples, to mimic the look of the real Neve and Lucie. As the boys get their long hair attached, Harry finds a doctor and bribes him into prescribing two sets of female hormones for the boys, hoping for either of the boys to be more willing to have sex with him. But he has to do one more thing... The boys spot the PI and decide to walk back to the boat to lounge there. They enjoy the sun on their bikini clad bodies and wave to the PI, but he wants to hear their story. He approaches them and they pull on a quick robe to hide the fact they don’t have breasts. The ‘girls’ explain that they’ve run away from their families and want to discover who they really are on the inside and asked the captain to lie on their behalf. As they’re talking, the PI believes their story but as he was paid to keep track of the girls he says he will check up on them at the next stop in Fiji, to make sure everything is okay. This panics the main character, but Jonas likes the idea of continuing to pretend to be a woman for a few more weeks, liking the idea of remaining as close to Mandy as he was the last couple of weeks. When Harry returns it turns out he called in the man overboard protocol for the main character and Jonas, leaving us no option than to remain female for a longer time. Not knowing how it happened, the boys find their body much softer. They don’t know how it is possible and they ask Mandy if she uses different ingredients to cook their meal. She dodges the question and says it’s probably got something to do with the food on Samoa, as Harry listens in with a smile. He spiked the food with the hormones he got and even got Mandy to cooperate, as the female hormones would leave her a more feminised Jonas. The weeks pass by and their chest is a bit flubby, despite them eating less and losing some muscle mass. They don’t really notice anything being out of place, as they’re fully living as women. The long hair is a constant reminder of their situation and they’ve fully adopted wearing the clothes of Neve and Lucie, they can’t remember the last time they wore their own clothes. The main character is afraid of losing himself and wants to wear some of his boy clothes, only to find out all his clothes are gone from his suitcase, as if someone threw them overboard. Jonas doesn’t care, he’s fully on board being a woman and hasn’t checked his own cabin in a while anyway; he’s sleeping with Mandy. MC confronts Harry about her clothes, he’s surprised and promises he has nothing to do with it, but MC doesn’t believe him but lets it go, partially because MC is afraid of Harry. There’s nothing to be done about it anyway, so he puts on a bikini and decides to get a tan after his tasks for the day are done. When the ship is close to Fiji, Harry asks the MC (Neve) to enjoy a dinner with him. Jonas/Lucie and Mandy have been enjoying food together with the two of them and Mal and Kyra have romantically enjoyed dinner, so the MC doesn’t see much harm in not eating alone. Even if it is with Harry, a man she distrusts. The man who considered himself a God on the ship, which turned the MC into an atheist. But it’s a lovely meal together and Harry is very respectable to the MC. The next day she is yet again invited to enjoy a meal together and Neve decides she wants to dress up for him. She wears a low-cut sundress to show her growing breasts. When Harry stares at them, she gleefully teases “more me than padding”, which drives Harry wild. He truly feels like a God, having created a woman out of a man. But he decides to take things slowly. They’re almost at Fiji, which is a place for the MC to run if he rushes things. After leaving Fiji and in the high seas on their way to Sydney is when he can take his chance... On Fiji Lucie and Neve get away and have a chat about their new lives. Neve asks Lucie if she ever thinks back of living her life as a guy, but she rejects it. She embraces her newfound femininity and to confirm that, she goes to a plastic surgeon and has an orchidectomy and minor breast augmentation booked for the next day. This confuses Neve, but excites Mandy. To take everything in, Neve goes to a sea bar and orders herself a cocktail; her first alcoholic drink in months. The PI comes and sits next to her and they start talking. Neve realises she can not talk about her life as a man, as she has to convince the PI she’s Neve [insert last name], but she feels she can be as open to him as she’s been in a long time. She feels connected to him, which may partially be due to the alcohol. Alcohol her slimmed down and feminine body does not handle as well as her male body could. She feels attracted to the PI, which is even weirder to her. Before she does something physically to him, she feels the need to say goodbye to him, but hugs him when she does. It empowers her to feel his erection, it’s like she finally has direct influence on something after having followed other people’s wishes on the boat. The next day, Lucies surgery is early in the morning. There is no time for her to recover on land, as the boat is planned to leave for Sydney in the afternoon. So she boards the ship all bandaged up. Weirded out by the whole situation Neve keeps her distance and Lucie permanently moves into Mandys cabin, she also takes care of her. That evening Harry gets pushy with Neve. Neve, being vulnerable and confused after her mixed feelings to male contact the day before lets Harry go further than she ever would a man a few months ago. Here she is, in a bikini with her ever budding breasts, her penis tucked away and her long hair flowing in the wind. Is male attraction really that weird for a girl who looks like she does? She realises it isn’t and she decides to play with Harry’s attraction. But it’s dangerous, as he is still the man who raped the girls before. Mal may have settled down with Kyra and Kyra may be a close friend of Neve now, but Harry has been sexually frustrated for months. The months it took for the MC to be feminised into the new Neve were months Harry could only look on from the sidelines. Now he feels is his time to grab the woman he molded with the estrogen injections, slight force and marking [MC name] as a drownee. Now there’s only the girl and as long as they’re on board of his ship, the girl is his. So he tries to rape her. But Kyra hears Neve scream and she enters the cabin. She grabs a knife and stabs Harry, who bleeds to death. Mal looks as his close friend is dying but realises there is nothing he can do. After Harry takes his last breath, in familiar fashion Mal stabs the lungs and belly cavity to ensure the body would sink. He then sails the boat back to Fiji, where they would arrive late in the afternoon the next day. Before that happens, Mandy helps Lucie take off her bandages and kisses her. Neve walks off to the shore and finds the PI, who she kisses too. She tells him to tell her family she’s happy and willing to get back in touch with them but she has last one thing to do. The PI kisses her back but parts ways, saying he has to look into a case involving the Sundial. Neve doesn’t know what it means, but she has her focus on something else: go to the same surgeon as Lucie did the day before. Anyway, that's just my two cents. It's a quick story that I'm sure you're much better working out in between events than I am; that's what I like about your writing. I'm just a big-bullet-point-kind-of-idea girl. I'm not sure this is what you were going for in your story, but it's a story I think would be a great read with your spin to it. I'd love to hear your thoughts. :)

Maryanne Peters

The idea is that the boys take the place of the two dead girls and collect money from the grandfather as they stay aboard and head for Australia. I just want the villains to suffer an appropriate fate and the "girls" to end up as girls, perhaps reunited with their parents and perhaps adopted as grandchildren by the rich guy. I will work something with what you have sent me and perhaps DM you somehow?

Eva

I feel I sort of went for what you were after here, with Harry dead and Mal to be locked up after the main character tells the PI everything. Like I said, I'm not a writer but I do enjoy reading plus I have a fair bit of imagination so it's probably a bit rough around the edges. My goal for the end result in this little rough story was for the new Neve and Lucie to embrace their female identities and live life with those two identities, but still separate from each other. They grew apart and they're taking a different path; Lucie being a lesbian with Mandy and Neve will explore her options. That's open for interpretation, but she doesn't shy away from kissing a man. Which could help her get back in good graces with Neves family to go for that wealth. I'd love to get a DM or two if you're open to it. I'm not sure how well the Patreon DM system works, but let's give it a shot. :)