Book Treatment - Pass 1 (Patreon)

An exclusive for you all: I am developing the pitch package for the birrin book! That will require finally deciding on names and titles, but I present to you the first pass at a synopsis.

Critique the hell out of it: I appreciate fierce feedback, when honest.

“Two sisters are coming of age in a vibrant community of birrin spread along Two Sky River, a swathe of vibrant life cutting through the sun-blasted Kiln desert, and the great ruins of the civilization that once almost burned their world.

Their adopted mother serves as their guide to the wonders of the river valley and the lives their families have built as traders and stewards of the land. Elder sister Siljarri, aloof and fiercely protective, keeps young and precocious sister Nil close under wing. Together, they encounter great intelligent sea creatures, skies wheeling with winged darting hunters, and the giants of the valley who work with the birrin to make their living from the land.

Yet one dawn, strangers arrive in Two Sky River. In great machines from across the Kiln desert they promise the people of the valley that, as partners, the glories of the old burned world can be reclaimed. As Siljarri and Nil face a quickly changing future, a shadow falls across the valley as the newcomers dig deeper into bones of the old world.”