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Danicorn

Great stuff, though the dialogue is a little clunky and incorrect at times. But super hot scene♡

Popogori

thank you, but what parts are clunky or incorrect to you?

Danicorn

1. "Shego our my first crush as a kid". Should be either "Shego was my first crush as a kid" OR "... was our first crush as a kid", depending if you want him to be speaking for himself or for his friends too. 2. "Wanna make me n, my boys..." Should be "wanna make me and my boys..."

Popogori

already fixed 1 but was using N like (fish n chips), but looking it up now I guess it should've been 'n' or n' not n, lol woops

Danicorn

Yeah I assume you were going for the shortened version of "and", but using "," instead of " ' " fucks it up haha. Anyway, great work with the pose!