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The early release for chapters 16 to 18 is ready! I hope you enjoy.

This release is a little longer than usual because I wanted it to end at a specific point, and as I was writing, I realized I needed a few more connecting scenes to link everything together. I set 12k words as the minimum for a release, and I'm usually closer to 13k, but this one comes out to 14.7k.

I'm hoping to find some readers who can help with specific feedback on these chapters. Do we have any musicians or musical theorists who can look over Katrin's scene in chapter 18 and give feedback on the use of musical terms? I'm not a musician, so I'm not sure how close I managed to get.

Also, when I need names for the story, I sometimes select a region of the real world and pull names from there, then modify them slightly, just to give some sense of consistency for that area. Do we have any native Greek speakers who could look over some of the place names I'm using? I had to pull translations for individual words from Google, and I don't know how well those words fit together. In the story, it's not the actual Greek language, of course, so they don't have to be a perfect match, but I'd like to make sure I didn't say anything too silly.

And any other feedback would also be welcomed, as always.

Thanks for reading!

--Ivy

Comments

Ed Clark

I think I found this on SOL... Maybe a week ago. After book one I jumped on to patreon and joined your army. I had that much faith then. Before I even read anything else. And before I go all fangirl on you I need you and everyone else to know; I'm a 39 year old construction worker, a United States Marine, and a hermit that spends his time reading online stories.

Ed Clark

Fan girl time. OMFG. I haven't had a story that literally made me stand up and clap, laugh, and cry in joy at all. This one has made me do all three. Thank you and please keep doing what you do @ivy veritas

ivyveritas

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you're enjoying the story. My role models are authors of complex, epic high fantasy with multiple interwoven storylines. This is my first attempt within that genre, and I think I'm learning a lot.

Ed Clark

I look forward to reading everything you write. I, also truly hope you are younger than me, so I don't have to outlive another great author.