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Ivy #5 - Blue Snake (Patreon)

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2020-06-15 03:12:42
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2026-06
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It's been tough, but here we go! Tried a new view in this one, hope you enjoy it!

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Ivy-vs-snake.mp4

Comments

Nanaka Kitano

Some thoughts on this sort of video, only my opinions so take it or leave it: * Ivy is absolutely gorgeous, you can't go wrong with her * More context would be nice, some dialogue setting up the situation, even if very basic would be nice * More from Ivy as she's being eaten/inside - either thoughts with speech bubbles or her saying it outloud * I feel that often times your videos have good parts but there can be extremely long sections that I feel are just minutes of "repeated information" - a bit of a lingering shot can be nice but when it's 3 or 4 minutes of basically the exact same thing I start skipping through to get to the next bit, dialogue/thoughts things for her to say would help tremendously, also changing up shots, maybe see if you can create some more effects (I appreciate FX are hard and you're working in hotel rooms rather than a studio, but I'm sure there's a few basic things you could probably work out to just sell some parts a little more). * Sound effects - there's lots of free sound effects libraries online that you could use to add more variation, swallowing/burping sound effects etc. * Don't always feel that a longer video makes it better - a short video that's dense in context/thoughts/dialogue/shot changes/effects is (for me at least) much more worthwhile than 15 minutes where there's effectively 5 different shots that each last for 3 minutes and I feel I just end up skipping 90% of it. I hope you take this as constructive criticism, I really like your work, just some ideas that I think could help take you to the next level (I haven't watched all of your stuff yet and I do appreciate some of these videos I'm commenting on are older as well, I will catch up on more and see if my opinions change).

Ghostdragon

The only thing I would critique is: if it would be possible to have the models covered with a thick slime for internal views such as this~