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Only took 10 months... Homelands 25. (Patreon)

Published:
2021-10-25 03:43:11
Imported:
2026-06

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Sorry I've been quiet the last 2 weeks.  I was writing up a bit for the Zencori but got on a stretch of writing chapter 25.  I finished it and it still needs editing, but I figure folks who don't mind this a little raw will be glad for it.  I'm also doing more temp work during the holiday season so that's eating into my time a little.

Hope everyone enjoys.  Reactions are welcome (and might actually affect edits, not gonna lie). 

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ctyiv_ycECW-UUcYjoNFGmu4pcgcfjwXCrenYWQT8QE/edit?usp=sharing

Comments

Nido76

Wonderful work as always. I like these chapters that show stuff happening outside of the main cast. Probably should finish re-reading the whole thing to get caught up and remember who's who.

Morgan E. Harvey

Oh my god this made my day to wake up to see that you've posted this. First time with a hot chapter since joining patreon so putting my thoughts here, I guess? Spoilers abound so caution to anyone who hasn’t read it yet Bone Legion- I was definitely wondering how Marrow would take to leadership so this was a good read. But the legionnaire spiritual contamination fascinates me. Will it go away if they choose a new Caesar? Since the bone legion one is related to a black book… are they all that way? Hmm. Taliba- Ach I’m getting library of Alexandria vibes here. So much ancient knowledge lost beneath the water! What a crime. But then the writing of Taliba’s name in the book? Huh?? Uh oh what’s going on there? ...And who is broken?! It couldn’t be Hiroto, could it?? Oh my god I just hit the mushroom part. Absolutely brutal. But now Dealer’s showing up to other folks now? What part does she have to play, I wonder? Rice River- Wait how old is Cecilio? Huh. Lots of people still in play after the war. Secrets, secrets, secrets. Vicious, Tcherno, Lumi- Ahhh more black book details. Oh, interesting, I wasn’t expecting the connection with Lumi. At some point, scotch will remember that Tom was a star spirit too. Oh, right. I forgot Vicious’ cancer. Poor pony. She deserves to go out with a bang, not with the wasting away BS. “Coming of winter? That sounds ominous.” “Not if you’re a snowflake.” I kinda really like that exchange. Scotch is bringing change. To some it will feel awful, but to others it will be the change they needed to thrive. The Post Office- Buy more bowling pins oh my god Mahelani- Love the buddy comedy between Mahelani and Thrush haha Poor Lani. Mahelani reminds me of my wife sometimes, and Thrush is more along the lines of myself. Not sure that’s a good thing.Oh shit riptide uhohhhhhh (That reminds me gotta finish the spotify playlist I was making themed on her) nnngh those fliers just still make me shiver. And the Riptide is just far too clean. I’m getting spirit deal vibes from that. NIHUI! Oh, my sweet little shark girl, I missed you. Welp time to reread this chapter now and really imprint it in my head. I honestly love these different POV chapters. So many stories leave me in the dark about what’s going on elsewhere. I appreciate that you don’t. So many interesting characters. It’s nice to get to continue their stories too. Also, thanks for spending the time to write for us. It’s much appreciated, especially considering how long writing can take. I hope you’re doing well and that your mental health is ok. Hope my post wasn’t too long.

DocSpit

Goodness, has it really been ten months? Well, in that case I guess I have no choice but to reread all of Homelands again to remind myself what's happened!

NTG

These character spotlights are great. Scotch’s actions have set a chain of events in motion that may change Zebrica forver. It also helps fleshing out several character we otherwise wouldn’t have seen again. And it prevents Scotch from looking like the “Mighty Whitey” (or Greeny) who easily solves all the problems in Zebrica by just passing through while the locals sat on their butts doing nothing for 200 years. Although, I’m still a bit worried how all these subplots will reach a satisfying conclusion without this story getting twice as big size as PH. XD Some other thoughts (beware SPOILERS BELOW!): - We already knew that something is very wrong with the brands of the legionaries, but it’s worse than expected. However, both Marrow and the current Tempest are aware of the fact that something is wrong with them so it may be possible to resist the influence of the branding to a certain degree. That said I would be really disappointed if the branding is the main reason why the legions are the way they are. Good old-fashioned greed and every general believing that he/she’s knows what’s best for Zebrica and refusing to submit to another authority sound far more interesting than “evil magic made them do it”. - I was wondering how the Sphinx was able to fit thought the door of Marrow’s office, but the Sphinxes in this story are probably about the same size as a Pony/Zebra and not as big as in the show. While skiming over the Chapter 16 I also noticed that her name is actually Asheput and not Hasheput as in this chapter. 😉 - Did the Secretariat just wrote Taliba’s name into the Death Notes? - It’s really – and I mean REALLY – obvious who Broken really is. Even for someone who hasn’t read the Tribe lore entries. Part of me actually hopes it’s just a red herring and Broken is someone completely different. - Now that I think of it, almost all of the pre-apocalypse characters both Blackjack and Scotch met are either war heroes or are coincidentally involved in the secret project/conspiracy the main plot is all about. Scotch/Blackjack don’t meet someone like Bob the Ghoul who was a shoeshiner before the war. No, it has to been General Important the immortal cyborg ghoul who was a member of the conspiracy that killed the real Caesar and replaced him with a clone or something like that. Okay Scotch met one Zebra Ghoul who was just a normal guy. But she also met three members of the Magnificent Twelve and I bet there will be more in the future. - The Dealer(s) are interested in Talib. That’s not good. He must be still angry that Scotch didn’t pick a card and decided to find a new filly to screw with. ;) Also, she now has met both Trailblazer and Dealer. All that’s left is a spirit from a Black Book and she can be the new Scotch. - Something tells me that when the chips are down, Cecilio, would do the right thing and use the fungi to kill the razor grass instead of letting everyone starve. The real question is: Would he eventually do the same thing if the situation wasn’t as dire? - Likes to shoot things, has trouble understanding more complicated subjects and loves sex. Yep, Vicious is Evil Blackjack. I think that’s actually going to be my new nickname for her. XD Hopefully, one day we will learn what turn her into a killer. - The shaman probably made a huge mistake giving her cancer. As I said: She’s Evil Blackjack. And what happened when Blackjack got cancer? That’s right! Soon there will be a very angry Cyborg Alicorn who has no problems being an executioner. XD - Huh, so Charity was actually set up by one of her employees? Who also happened to be a former Crusader and probably grew up with her. That’s cold! Wonder if she wanted to take over or simply hated Charity that much. - Mahelani's and Thrush's part feels like it’s part of a really good buddy movie. Can’t wait to see more of them and their quest to foil Riptide’s schemes. Nihui joining them was also pretty unexpected. When Riptide learns that she gone, she will chase the two to the end of the world. On the other hand, if there's anyone who can actually convince Riptide to change her ways and become a better Zebras it 's her daughter. So if Nihui learns to "do better" Riptide will follow.