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Teaching Her A Lesson Part 10, early release (Patreon)

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2020-07-03 23:58:48
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2026-06
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Double digits, baby. Here we are with installment 10 of THAL. It's split pretty evenly between two scenes, one giving us a little introduction to Cassie Brown, and other revisiting matters between Mr. Canon and Abbie. They're both very dialogue-centric, in their own ways. I am a big fan of dialogue in my smut, and I wanted to have some fun with it here. One of the things I am digging about this series is the huge distinctions in personalities among its cast. TIOS had some of this, though really, it wasn't all that hard to imagine them all being in the same room. It wouldn't take a ton of reinventing to make most of them friends, and Kristy proud to be their teacher. Here, there's so much more friction. Taylor and Abbie as sisters similar enough to grate on one another; Mr. Canon and his more scrupulous colleagues, both totally disinterested in him; Mr. Canon and the Stern girls in their cold war between his autocratic management style and their contempt for authority; and so on. Everybody's putting up with something in this, and everybody's getting something out of it anyway. I am digging it.

Originally, this chapter was supposed to encompass several more such "one on one conferences" (per the section's title), but it was already 10k words so I cut it off there. I may well continue this format and do a part 10 part 2 next, but we'll see. We may finally get a real break from this story to work on other stuff for a little bit, but we'll see. (June's commission drawing winner never got back to me, so I'm doing 2 this month; hopefully I hear back this time, but if not, THALward, HO!) 

In the meantime, have a great weekend everybody. I'd wish my American readers a happy Independence Day, but freedom is a 4-letter word in my line of work. :) Grill some food, though. More to come!

Comments

WDB

I'm only a few pages in, but if you're asking me if I want there to be a series where Cassie reviews fetish porn, the answer is an emphatic YES.

R Masters

Whoa, I thought part 9 was the ending. Awesome

ukyo_rulz

Earlier I said that Abbie might be my favorite girl you've written. With this chapter, I confirmed it. I love everything about her, basically. How she thinks, how she acts, how she views life and the world around her. I've mentioned before that I'm not super into the bimbo-centric side of MC erotica. Abbie is kinda the opposite of a mind-controlled bimbo.

cuzimhavingagoodtime

Casey is adorable. More Casey! That is the extent of my feedback.

Addiction

EDIT: Post-aaargh and more dignified. So having just blazed through this after being unable to wait for the rest on the EMCA (congrats, you got me!) I wanted to jot down my thoughts. Seeing that others are doing the same thing makes me feel less guilty for sharing my opinion. So first off, really good. I definitely enjoy the story so far and am intrigued to see where it's going. That being said, there's some specific issues that I have. I want to add that you can freely discard these if you see fit, so please don't see it as a demand or anything on my end: 1) There's a lot of build-up but very little climax in each chapter so far. Every chapter does a bang-up job of teasing and building up a pivotal moment...and then pulls away at the end and glossing over those aspects. I get that that's narrative tension but it happens so often it's noticably strange. It's not just the porn bits, though my prurient soul was dissapointed when we just gloss over a wild night of sex. It's also with important scenes and story bits. Skipping over Abbie's suggestions for Canon is fine, he's not aware and he's the focal character so we're not aware. But then we're never shown what else was written down for him. Fine on its own but then in chapter 6 to chapter 7, we skip over the reveal of the blackmailer and skip to a morning greeting. Cool, to make it more interesting for the reader and make them wait. Then chapter 8 to 9 we skip the important reveal that Barbour was there too. We don't see what happens with Megan, etc... It feels like a lot of skipping for the sake of tension, which works, but very little actual 'reveals' or climaxes, which makes it a feel a little unsatisfying. 2) Of all the personalities in the story, Taylor is the most bland and we've barely learned anything about her compared to the others. Which is strange, since she is the focus of the whole thing (or so it seemed). Part of it is that she is overshadowed by her sister, Abbie is far more bombastic, dominant and driven than her sister. Because their personalities are similar and Taylor is far more reluctant and less 'present' in the story, it feels like she's very bland. For all the other characters there seems to be a background or at least a life outside of school and being 'booty-called', Taylor doesn't have that. Abbie does cosplay, is a 'camgirl' and has distinct interests. Officer Barbour is the 'straight man' (the irony) (or was before the incident) and has the whole law-enforcement archetype going for her, she has a girlfriend and secret pet-names. Cassie is basically Kylie from TIOS, minus the smarts (honestly she comes across a little dumb), she does track and there's the whole mom angle. Casandra is a teacher, an ex-party girl and also tied into other characters. Megan isn't really a character so far (but you fixed that in the latest update). A bit long-winded but Taylor lacks this depth, currently despite being the titular 'her'. 3) and this is purely stylistically, so it's a personal discretion thing but I (just me, doesn't have to be you) prefer slightly more descriptions of the appearance. I might just be bad at this in particular, but I find it difficult to remember what hair colour etc characters are. That and, especially in this chapter we mostly 'hear' what the sex feels like from Casey but we don't 'see' what the sex is like. Again, might just be my personal preference but I'm putting it out there. Again, you're the writer so don't take these as mandates or anything.

R Masters

I'd love a look at Abbie and Taylor's home life, now that Abbie is the boss.

Whisper

Enjoying the story a lot. To the point that this the first time that I have ever back someone on patreon. I am egar for the next chapter.