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Howdy, gang! Here we are, part 23 of my probably-only-two-or-three-parts story concept. Sorry it took me so long (is that long? after that spree I was on for a while there I don't remember). I turned 40 yesterday -- whee -- so I lost a couple days of productivity to existential dread. (I am *not* a birthday person, at least when it comes to my own.) Anyway, we somehow survived, and got the installment finished.

Some musings below, but this is for sure a case of read the story first, so... STOP READING until you've read the story.

MORE MUSINGS (because I think I mused last time, and probably most times)

I didn't expect the investigation to be cut as short as it was, honestly. There's an extent to which I sort of wrote myself into a corner and regret it a bit. It's why for the longest time I avoided any specificity in the timeline, other than "spring" and "near the end of the school year." Now we only have a week and change left (and finals week could make some things weird), and our narrative is about a teacher banging his students. We can't resolve that while he's not a teacher, and even after this installment, he's not actually reinstated, so we still have that hurdle. Being fired, even as a unionized employee, has a way lower threshold of evidence, after all. As to Shipman's conclusions, I had to step back and remind myself that ageism and sexism are real things, alive and well in the criminal justice system, and that it's not the weirdest thing to have a guy dismiss allegations like these on the grounds of "you know how bitches be." Earlier this year I watched Unbelievable on Netflix; not quite the same thing, but not dissimilar? And I for sure believed it in Unbelievable. (They probably got better writers than yours truly, though. That show was freaking good.)

I've said that I've been letting this story free-flow a lot, so it chafes no small amount to have to force it like this, and this quickly. I considered saving the ending bit with Shipman for 24, but it's not really enough to merit its own thing, and I don't want to turn this into any more of a crime procedural than it's already gotten the past few chapters. Still, I think it at least helps redirect us to the more central conflict of the story, resolving how Mr. Canon relates to his students, both as a teacher and as a man, and how do they relate to him. I won't go deeper into my own thought processes along those lines, at least not presently, because I know a lot of you have your own thoughts and feelings and theories about all that, and I don't want to crowd anybody out of them with authorspeak.

Enjoy, and more to come!

Comments

WDB

hashtag get cassie a residency or internship or something at pornhub, hashtag i think it's called hotdogging, hashtag unofficial jbb presents sequel, hashtag happy birthday.

WDB

I do love Cassie's lack of filter. It's such an endlessly funny character trait, right alongside the way *multiple girls* take advantage of her naivete and kindness to learn her tricks and edge her out of the running for Canon's attention. She's too nice! Goddamn you, Tabitha! Let her enjoy her butt sex! The rest of the chapter was pretty great, especially that twist at the end. Was not expecting Canon to go nuclear on the Sterns like that, and it's hilarious how his sense of scale swung from My Life Is Going To Be Over to The Cops Will Probably Treat These Girls As No Big Deal Despite The Mounting Charges Against Them. He didn't... did he think this one 100% through? Feels like he wasn't thinking too much about how this would land on the Sterns. And, yeah, I like that. I don't really care if Canon loses his job or whatever, in terms of the story's consequences. I *do* care how he's treating/treated the women in his life, though, so this chapter is especially fraught and tense. People have been all What Does Canon See In The Sterns, but, shit, I'm not sure he deserves *them* at this point. He really fucked up their lives!

InCompleteController

Grammar: “So is it really true that Tabitha gets graded on her performance?” Tabitha asked as she kicked off her shoes. - I’m guessing its Cassie that’s supposed to say that. The story: I do like all the clever ways that the group is trying to stay on top of the investigation, so it’s a bit of a shame there doesn’t seem to be any payoff from it. The greatest mistake with this whole series has definitely been to start it at the end of the graduation year. I kinda wish it would get retconned to take place at the beginning, just so things have more time to flow naturally. Also, Canon, what a true gentleman, keeping his promise to let Cassie be the next girl to receive anal, despite her not being aware of such promise. But in all honesty, it’s good to see that Canon actually care for the girls, especially the more innocent ones. Then we get to Abbie and Taylor, or perhaps just Abbie as Taylor might just be following orders. It was a clever way of getting a message to Canon, whilst under investigation, but they went waaay overboard with it. In typical Abbie fashion, she’s consistently underestimating how mad people get because she grew up pretty, as some people call it, so she has always been shielded from the consequences. Also, once again Canon is having girls over, whilst under investigation. They really need to dose Robby and build a tunnel between the two houses before they get caught. But it’s not too long their relationship can get into the open. Tabitha is starting to get very manipulative, trying to one up Cassie like that. Hopefully it doesn’t take too long for her to get on the path controlling the other girls and being Canon’s perfect girl in that respect, rather than trying to copy all other girls talent. The twist was excellent. At first I expected Louisa to step out and I did facepalm at Canon admitting Cassie and Tabitha being at his place. The custodian being one to provide Canon with an alibi was brilliant, yet another point for our unsung heroes. Finally, Shipman’s character is great. I like that it feels like he has a personal vendetta with women and false accusations. The question will be if he’s right about it or if he’s just a lone wolf. Thoughts and theories: First thought is once again that the story started too late in the finals year. The theory being that it can be saved by having Canon start up at wherever the girls end up next, with just Abbie being left behind. I do hope that Tabitha steps up and becomes Canon’s queen. Cassie is practically wrapped around her finger, so a next step might be to get Megan as well. Then again, with the whole end of the year, there’s not much point in turning the neighbors house into her place, when she will be able to just crash at Canon’s house whenever she wants. I’m a bit miffed about there likely not being a cat and mouse game between Canon and Horen, with Horen knowing that something was not right, but the official investigation not giving her any proof. With the girls leaving soon, there’s almost no point to such a scenario, and it seems like it will just turn into an “oh yeah, that happened” part of the story since the consequences seem irrelevant. So yeah, plenty of theories at the moment can pretty much be summed up as “wouldn’t it be awesome if …” followed by “… but it feels like it’s too late for that.” I would like to know what’s going on with Abbie, but there’s too much chaos on that front for me to even want to start speculating. So unfortunately my main interest right now is seeing how Tabitha is going to be Canon’s perfect girl. I had thought Abbie or Taylor would eventually take more charge of him, but their plans are always very short sighted. I do wish to see Tabitha trying to get in charge of Abbie, maybe with a bit of help from Taylor. It would be an interesting fight, with Tabitha being smarter and willing help from others vs Abbie and the unwilling help she can get from having used Serenex on everybody (except for Megan).

InCompleteController

Sadly, the Sterns are falling out of interest for me. Like I said previously, Tabitha and Abbie affect the story in somewhat the same way, since they both try to predict Canon’s desires and try to fulfill them. The difference being that Abbie is waaay too chaotic in how she sets up these scenarios. Also, with the end of the year and Canon likely not having a job at GHS anymore, the chaos that Abbie can inject to the story just seem to come to an end. It’s really only because Abbie is the one to have dosed everything that I think she will still be relevant to the story. I also don’t see Canon being the main guy at fault here. Abbie has been the engine of chaos in setting up the bar scene and the egging. Sure, things are getting more out of hand than expected, but it feels like it was only a matter of time.

Sagesse

One more grammar catch: Forego is to go before. Forgo is to go without.

WDB

It feels like a betrayal to me. Abbie and Taylor were clearly trying to reach out to Canon (the egging was a pretty great cover for getting him a message that supported his alibi), and he set them up. Like, I'm sure he didn't think it was anything more than some small bit of leverage against Horen, but *holy shit* does treat two women who (in weird ways) actually care about Canon like pawns he's discarding. It's cruel in a way that I don't think they come close to deserving, and I'm excited to see Canon have to deal with that guilt. That said, he needs to flush the remaining Serenex *immediately*, because things are going to get very bad very fast if a wronged Abbie Stern shows up looking for it. She's a terror with that shit when she's trying to help, I can't imagine what she'd get up to if she's actually mad at him. He's enraged easily the two most dangerous characters in the story. This was not a smart move! (It also... it's maybe an *unnecessary* move? It's the final nail in the case against him, sure, but it doesn't seem like he was going to get charged with anything? There's an impatience to Canon in the last couple chapters, where The Smart Move would be to leave things alone, but he *has* to keep interacting with people, scheming, etc. He's maybe irreparably harmed his relationship with the Sterns, and ruined their futures, for a +1d4 to Innocence. And it's a d100 roll! Unnecessary!)

WDB

I'm not sure I feel like the Horen stuff is going to be so inconsequential. She's not going to be so easily placated by some misogynist cop! She knows what she saw! The timing of the series... doesn't it need to start with Canon trying to get Taylor on track before it's too late for her to graduate? If the story starts super early in the school year, why would Canon need to have her do all of the missed/ignored schoolwork? Curious to know what you'd like to see with an endgame. Would you want the Sterns around at all at this point? Or just have Canon end up with Tabitha by herself?

InCompleteController

Things have definitely gotten out of hand, but neither Abbie nor Canon are doing much to communicate or figure things out. The main issue with the egging is that it wasn’t used for anything at all, besides a request for a booty call that was later handled over Cassie’s phone. So the end result was simply that Canon’s house got egged, the guy who had just been fired because of Abbie. Sure it was a dirty move to arrest them like that, but that’s not really why they are in trouble at the moment. Right now, the problem is that Shipman is convinced that the Sterns are bad and that he’s going to do everything in his power to throw the book at them. The only way that the egging would not have led to that, was if Canon hadn’t reported the egging at all. My theory is that Shipman is a lone wolf in the police force, someone that got burned by an ex or another pretty girl, and now has a vendetta against people that got off easy because of their looks. He’ll be a good antagonist, and won’t be as daunting to go up against as the investigation team that were set up against Canon. So yeah, there’s going to be a whole lot of barking between Abbie and Canon, but both have a pretty good reason to be annoyed at each other because both have done pretty self serving things that came at a heavy price for the other party. I do wonder what Abbie’s future role in this story will be. Undoubtedly the fact that she has dosed everyone will come into play, but beyond that her immaturity is getting in the way. I just don’t know what her game is, because I saw her as the 2nd best at reading Canon, but as of late she has had some pretty big misses.

WDB

The egging thing... I mean, Canon's right, they *are* kids. Egging his house is a great cover for trying to reach out to him (it plays into their cover story), because they're *trying to reach out to him*. It's not... I don't think it's purely sex with the Sterns, just like it's no longer purely sex with Tabitha or Cassie. Like, you're right to mention poor communication in your first paragraph. The Sterns have no idea how to be emotionally honest, without a layer of snark/aggression/control to keep things from getting too real, so everything they do has to have a certain amount of Their Bullshit scraped off of the top. They were trying to reconnect with him, and he sacrificed them for his own safety. It's so disrespectful of what they're going through, even if they're being immature about their needs. For Shipman, I don't know. I'm not feeling like he'll be a big on-screen part of this story going forward. He's good to have in the world as a threat and/or a cautionary tale (Canon definitely doesn't want to see the Sterns the way Shipman sees the Sterns), but the real emphasis is on how Canon navigates the consequences of his choices, and how the Sterns feel about him going forward.

InCompleteController

I've tried posting this response a few times with no luck, hopefully there won't be a flood of duplicates. The issue with Horen is that Canon was fired, and there’s not much plot reason to work there anymore. I’m not well versed in the American school system, but I don’t feel a year would have been too long to make up for several years of neglect. The pattern of Taylor being smart but lazy was there all along and who knows if such an achievement would even have been possible without the wonders of Serenex. That’s the thing, I haven’t envisioned an endgame beyond graduation. For me it has always been in the back of my mind that this is just going to be a continual story of sexy situations, with things often getting out of hand and new pieces getting added to the harem. So for me it would just be a rolling ball of the girls trying to be the preferred girl. I don’t even know if Tabitha would be the girl Canon would end up with, because I’m pretty sure Abbie is going to have issue with how perfect she’s trying to be. Thematically it would have to end with Canon and Taylor, but for that to happen Taylor likely needs to be her own boss again, which would also be an interesting series of events.

WDB

"I've tried posting this response a few times with no luck, hopefully there won't be a flood of duplicates." Ha ha, OH GOD, I've been there. Patreon basically thinks you're spam, due to the frequency of your posts. (They don't understand what it's like to be an Ice Bear fan!) You may need to send a message to Patreon Support, after which you'll be white-listed, and your posts should go through without a problem. "The issue with Horen is that Canon was fired, and there’s not much plot reason to work there anymore." Has he, though? My understanding was that the employment ramifications wouldn't occur until after the legal investigation had concluded. I think he still has his job, for the time being. "I’m not well versed in the American school system, but I don’t feel a year would have been too long to make up for several years of neglect." Sort of? Her (likely) failed classes from previous semesters will put her at a deficit as far as credits needed to graduate, which could be something that would need to be addressed at the beginning of her senior year. There just wouldn't be nearly as much pressure for her to do that, with an entire school year ahead of her. Certainly not enough for Canon to feel like he'd need to intervene. However, if she's failing a bunch of things for her final semester, that's going to be something that's more Do Or Die. So, yeah, maybe the story could've started earlier, but I'm not sure Canon would feel as responsible for improving her chances at graduating if there's seven months before graduation. "Thematically it would have to end with Canon and Taylor, but for that to happen Taylor likely needs to be her own boss again, which would also be an interesting series of events." Sounds good to me!

ukyo_rulz

I think you're being a bit hard on Canon with the benefit of 20/20 hindsight. It is, of course, pretty shitty of him to use his girls to take the fall for his own bad decisions but he was operating under the assumption that he was running the risk of prison time as a sex offender and the Sterns were, at worst, going to be expelled (a fate they were flying dangerously close to with or without his meddling). One of the things I like about the story is that every character really follows the "when your only tool is a hammer, everything looks like a nail" rule of problem-solving. Canon and Candy look at life through the lens of a HS teacher, Isa as a school cop, Tabbie as an honor student and Cassie as just a typical teen girl. Their actions (and reactions) reflect their life experiences. *Of course* the Sterns would come up with egging as a way to send a covert message to Canon. Pranking teachers is probably a reflexive instinct for both of them by now. *Of course* Canon wouldn't think that the girls could ever get into real trouble because he called the cops. Even Shipman's reaction makes sense based on his background. Ice clearly wrote the final scene trying to make the man seem like a menacing bad guy but did he really have that glint in his eye or did Canon just project that onto him? From his perspective the Sterns had nearly ruined a man's life "as a prank". It's perfectly understandable that he might want to throw the book at them. From his perspective Canon must seem hopelessly naive. His wink might have been an awkward attempt to make Canon feel better about the situation. ...or maybe he'll turn out to be a cartoonish villain type, straight out of an 80s movie. We'll find out in a week or so I guess.

Will Orlando

There is not much I can say that WDB or the other commentators haven't said already. I was surprised at Cannon calling the cops on the Sterns, not because it would help his case of potentially going to jail, but because he ran the risk of the Sterns turning on him (Although, I don't remember exactly all the rules they have to follow after getting serenex'ed). That could have been a much greater fallout, imagine if they decided to tell the cops what Cannon has been doing. Edit: Thinking more about this, I think this would have been a perfect time to see some cracks in the serenex programming. One of the Stern sisters sees Cannon's police call as a betrayal so large that it overrides their need to be in Cannon's life and they decide to somehow leave him causing him to think more about his relationship with his students.

WDB

Oh, for sure, I'm not suggesting anyone's decisions are out of character or lack motivation. Everyone's very much doing the sort of things you'd expect them to do after a couple dozen chapters of mind control erotica. It's more... I think Canon's done something in haste that's going to have massive ramifications for him, and unlike the diffused responsibility of Horen catching the girls in his classroom, this one's fully his responsibility and *a conscious decision he made*. He had been told by several people that he just needed to sit tight and things were likely to work out. But he got antsy, wanted some sense of control over his fate, and he offered up the Sterns to the cops. He didn't think anything *really* bad would happen to them, and he was still maybe pissed off at them, but he manipulated and betrayed them. It's a super shitty thing to do, made worse by how negligibly useful it was, and how willfully he did it.

WDB

And, just for clarity's sake, I don't think any of these things make for a bad story! This is the point in the romance (or romantic comedy) when someone fucks things up in a serious way, and then has to figure out how/if things can be salvaged. Canon pretty much has to do *something* awful, for the sake of dramatic storytelling. Getting mad at him for being an asshole and fucking things up? That's the chapter working as intended!

WDB

I'm not sure I can think of anything more terrifying than Abbie Stern: Vengeful Fantasy Slut.

HardhatDoozer

I know I’ve said it before, I’m team Taylor. So that means that although Tabitha is learning to gain his (sexual) approval I picture her in 10 years with a PhD and a new lover who is so impressed with her bedroom skills. Cassie in 10 years being a physiotherapist helping young athletes who are pro sport or Olympic sport potentials. Abbie in 10 years doing her own thing. Making herself happy. But Taylor being Mr Cannon’s goddess and mother of his twin daughters.

WDB

I'm a fan of everything you came up with, but I'm dead certain that Cassie's future is being basically fast-talking video game commentary series Zero Punctuation, but for PornHub.

InCompleteController

Don’t worry, I understand your viewpoint. Getting the police even more involved in the situation seemed way too risky for my liking, especially with Cassie and Tabitha in his house. However I do think you are focusing a bit too much on what Canon did, likely because it’s relatable to a real life scenario. I just don’t feel it’s that out of line, compared to other events in the story. We got a hint in this part that Tabitha holds a grudge against Abbie for turning her into “Canon’s fuck toy”, as she put it, just for the sake of a prank. Although in Abbie’s defense, she could never understand how far a person like Tabitha would go in order to gain Canon’s approval.

Mr. Snrub

Very agreed that Tabitha is the most compelling part of the story now by far. I'm rooting for her to become his queen so hard.