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My New Girlfriend, conclusion (Patreon)

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2016-12-30 23:17:00
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2026-06
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And here it is, the final chapter of My New Girlfriend. I look forward to the inevitable slew of emails about plot holes and errors, but hopefully it's soun enough to satisfy. Enjoy!

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Daniel

The whole story holds together nicely. Ice Bear probably held back on cause of control so that the whole story runs like a detective mystery. After revealing it, it seemed difficult to continue the story. I like that he explored the morality of how any subordinate would prefer a caring master. Moreover, the character Courtney played out to be the hottest subordinate ever, because she's not only fiercely loyal, but also an intelligent asset who can independently expand her leader's power (very dangerous if led by the power-hungry Arman). It would be interesting if future stories could maybe pit 2 different harem factions against each other with internal subversion activities (like a nice guy against a criminal organisation or alien invasion), while exploring the differences in leadership styles, motivations and the feelings of the women. Such a story would require more than one mechanism of control though (introduced in the order of progressive strength?). Haha just a suggestion inspired from what I read in New Girlfriend. PS: actually an alien invasion may have bigger scope and more room for expansion? A cool example of such an MC story is the 3D comic "The Hive" by Marvlin.

Gobstopper

Bravo. The conclusion was wonderful. This was one of the best MC stories I've ever read, and I think it will be infiltrating my lonely fantasies for years to come. Don't know whether to love you or hate you for that. :) I hope you keep writing (and enjoying it) for a good long while!

Dorian Alton

I would have liked to comment on this one earlier, but been busy on vacation :) I very much liked the conclusion of this one. The mystery was satisfying, and Drew, Courtney, Erika, Arman and even the minor characters came off as interesting, real people. The only thing I found a bit too over the top at the end was the sex scene on the bus, but it doesn't impact the mystery as a whole. Works very well as a standalone, but there is some potential for a sequel. For instance, even if Arman's girls are mostly happy with the situation, it looks like some of them (Morgan and Erika for example) were doing pretty poorly. I don't think a sequel with Drew, Courtney, and Erika going up against Arman would work. He doesn't seem like a bloodthirsty guy (he let the three of them get away with quite a lot), but he's still clearly more dangerous than them. I don't really see Drew's harem needing to expand either. I could see a sequel where Arman was killed by a rival or subordinate, and Courtney and company were involved in picking up the pieces.

Daniel

have to agree with Dorian, there could be a sequel, but Drew cannot be the aggressor. Maybe Arman’s boss/supplier got the bad news of his drug leaking out and wants to cut off loose ends, giving Arman a reason to seriously go after Courtney again (also as payback for the humiliation of losing her). Courtney could realise this threat (maybe after an attempt to kidnap her) and believe that the only way to stop it is to take out the source of haymana (plus she did want to rescue her other girls from evil clutches).

Daniel

further story ideas (for the lols): maybe the source of haymana only sold it to Arman so that he could test it for them, without them exposing themselves yet (that’s why they want to cut off loose ends like Drew). The source of haymana could be maybe an “african tribe that wants to slowly conquer the female population of the developed world” or “alien species that wants to conquer the world by subjugating its females as breeders and assimilating human genome cos humans are intelligent”. Jus random suggestions :)