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Wooo (Patreon)

Published:
2020-01-09 23:08:21
Imported:
2026-06

Content

In an alternate reality Blake became a varsity football team cheerleader and was always welcome in the locker room.

By the way the test version is still up (check the link in the post below) and I still need your opinion on it. No pressure though.

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Comments

Dukem

I really dig what you've done with Shattered so far and I can’t wait for more. I do have a bit of constructive criticism about an aspect of the storytelling in the latest version though. I am not a big fan of the "A week later" time skip in between parts. There are a lot of events that seem to have affected Blake as a person occur in that amount of time (including the introduction of several side characters), but we don't see these moments play out. They are just mentioned in a long exposition monologue, and while I like the writing in that monologue, I would rather have seen Blake's character develop rather than just be told about it afterwards.

Dukem

Okay, I can see what you were going for. Thanks for the response.