Fifty Shades Of Why- Episode 5, Chapters 9&10 (Patreon)

Patrons, I know that many of you don't necessarily listen to the bonus content that often (or at all), but if you could listen to this episode it would really help me out. At least listen to the first few minutes and the last few minutes, because I am asking you all for what you think and what you're looking for! I can't get over how badly edited this book is. The bad writing is one thing, and I can forgive someone for being an inexperienced, shitty writer...but bad editing is a whole other animal and I find that sin to be much harder to forgive. How many times can she bite her lip? How many times can his mouth "press into a hard line"? How comes sometimes her inner goddess speaks in italics and other times...oh, I give up. I hope you all enjoy the episode, and let me know the answers to all my questions!