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Yeah, a large bunch of chapters for this story the day after Younglings could first read it.

Why? Because I plan to go public in July and need to get the numbers/order down pat.

Acolyte through Apprentice tiers haven't seen all of these chapters yet either, so if that's your rank, you'll want to read these before it's time for your tier-level posts.

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0006: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eSNoqe-Id1H0fFIVjGE1Vse6LpRRS3tWnI2Pl4NlGQc/edit?usp=sharing

0007: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1dTL-8V5AL6RUGVk4gJ_DP2oID9GICGJhl9u_rdZHRhM/edit?usp=sharing

0008: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13nJVCiyNf6DRtLy46_tjicHSgmr2HxnrmQR75dXiJXw/edit?usp=sharing

0009: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1UXRpnacVFQi6DLF1UMgXGb58gI7kQXdy_KT7dzoA8RE/edit?usp=sharing

0010: https://docs.google.com/document/d/13jq1qtIRlaG9CZelID9GQFUmGwphyJndbSeejhkuCUw/edit?usp=sharing

0011: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YuVaA8uFD5tPceCup4AyG2DZb09VstNou-5RBFcfZ3Y/edit?usp=sharing

0012: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DcEQIY1pRVBZYhCjpsrtM2DnqiXuUSI0yoAhkWC8zzU/edit?usp=sharing

0013: https://docs.google.com/document/d/15aE4lp4PukXR_43S7T6Pm1ryhWVhlxx56oi_v7AMta4/edit?usp=sharing

0014: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WEE8O3L7lH78J1ypTaCQGhjKv8-biY-6j-eHhmuc700/edit?usp=sharing

0015: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MHKJRXLRaTvF3P1jYxN4QQdyiWF3QqMfYp216vRA97Y/edit?usp=sharing

Comments

Radiant Tiefling

Thank you very much for the plethora of chapters you released. Looking forward to the next chapters. Marcus is understandably isolating himself but he’s going to need people who care for him that he will eventually trust like Elena.

SlanneshSoldier69

Don't typically like critiquing work, but one thing I noticed on my end is too much "woe is me" I am a "secret" genius constantly hiding how smart I am mean while everyone who interacts with him suspects stuff. Him hiding how much smarter he actually is shouldn't prompt people to look at him suspiciously and fear how he is going to change things. The inability or lessened ability MC to socialize works fine in how its written.