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Hi everyone,

I wanted to share a quick progress update and let you know what I’ve been working on.

Over the past week, I’ve been focusing on Suzi’s subplot. I already had the story of the subplot worked out, but I’ve been developing the plot and started writing the dialogue. The subplot centres on Suzi’s role as the swim team captain and offers a deeper look into her character. It also ties into events later on during the Olympic trials.

So far, we mostly see Suzi in scenes with the MC, which can make her seem like she’s always angry—which isn’t the full picture. This new content should help her feel less one-dimensional.

In addition to the bigger issues I'm planning on tackling, there are also a lot of smaller things I want to address. One of those was the use of expressions like "LAUGH" or "CRYING" in the dialogue. I've now replaced all of them with more natural writing.

Progress updates might be a bit irregular until I begin work on V0.17, but I’ll do my best to keep you informed.

Thank you, as always, for your support!

DB

Comments

Jonathan Hang

This is different 😅! I like it 😋! I thought it made sense for Suzi's character. She hasn't gotten to know MC yet... unlike the rest of her family... and she's just gone through the whole Johno situation and has been in a stressful/high-pressure situation about making the swim team. ALL COMPLETELY understandable. But we could see that once she moved back in, she was starting to warm up to him. Thanks for the progress update, DB!!! Keep on keeping on 😉! Always excited and eagerly waiting ✊🏻!!! I CAN'T WAIT TO PLAY THE REwork 😁! Happy late July 4th 🎆🎇🧨✨ to everyone who celebrates!!! I got three days off from work this week 💪🏻💪🏻💪🏻!!! Time to binge/catch up on some AVNs 😋!!! LET'S GET IT 😛!!! Whether you're surviving in this HOT Summer 😎🌞🏖🔥 (like I am 🥵) or in the Cold Winter 🥶❄⛄🧊 (my Southern Hemisphere people). Always stay hydrated, everyone (no drinking my milk, though 🥛😋). Stay safe, stay blessed, and in PERFECT health, everyone! Have an amazing and beautiful week! I'll catch you all—ON THE NEXT ONE ✌🏻😁!!!

wibble

I am onboard with removing textual emotes. In visual novels, they're redundant as the renders should convey the same information anyway. A picture is worth a thousand words, and I think the adage about showing, not telling is very true in this medium. Also, good to know Suzy is getting a bit more dimension. It's going to be nice to get to know my future step daughter better ;)

DarkBlue

I've never seen that many emojis in a post before! 😁 Thanks, Jonathan. Enjoy your time off.

DarkBlue

Thanks, wibble. Maybe she'll become more than a step daughter once we get to know her better...😉

Metastatic Malady

Great to hear, I do like Suzi and can understand why she is the way she is, but it will be cool to dive deeper, pun intended? Any way, I love the story you have created and can't wait to read more. Keep up the amazing work!

天戈 李

This man is the hero of comment section

DarkBlue

Thank you. Glad you're enjoying it, Metastatic Malady. ❤

Jonathan Hang

@DB Thank you, DB! Days are going great BUT going by too fast 🤣! Hope everyone is doing well as well. That's just how I roll... emojis 😁.

Bo Otto

Been a great story. I'm always captivated by it. And looking forward to learning more about Suzi. It's all about Emma for me though. Out of the few VN that I love nobody pulls more on my heartstrings (and my shortstrings) more than Emma.

DarkBlue

Thanks, Bo. Emma has a special place in my heart also. ❤