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ep 73 script + some reworked/deleted panels (Patreon)

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2017-05-06 18:34:26
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Zen (Marty)

Once again, I think the final version is an improvement over the script. In particular, the "voice over" by Sunati at the end is really effective! It is a great way to end the episode. I love the way this episode and the previous episode mix together in my mind (as I mentioned in my comment on Line). It seems, to me at least, that Austen wouldn't have had the self-confidence to be this certain that she could send her girlfriend off on a 14 month sabbatical to another planet (ok... moon) and that the relationship would survive without Sunati's personality characteristics that she commented on in the previous episode and the way Sunati's love for her has pushed her to have more certainty that their relationship, and Austen herself, are worth waiting for. Maybe that's just me... (EDIT: And that second to the last sentence is a grammatical nightmare... I'm about to go through book 2 for a final pass before publication, so I'm looking for hideous things like that... I tend to write them... UGH!)