Faith, Draft 1, 1 5, outline, CH 15 (Patreon)

Faith in the Family, Commentary, CH 15

In which a friendly family football game has underling tension

Very few changes from my version to Ben’s. this might be the least changed chapter to date.

The difficulty with this chapter is in setting up something that will be revealed much, much, much later. And because it’s all in Thomas’s PoV I have to make sure he’s justified in misinterpreting the looks his brother gives him.

Situations like this are one of the difficulties with limited single PoV stories. A lot of stuff has to be implied instead of stated. But when it comes to implied incest, it’s probably for the best. One brother boning on the other is probably enough.

So that’s it on the comments, I hope you enjoy the file