Alexithon story :) (Patreon)

So, I just posted a $10 post, the prologue for my book/story 'Alexithon'. I have the next chapter done, but I am hoping this will help push me continue chapter 2, onwards.

If you can read it, PLEASE leave a critique, and comment, whether you like it, etc, or if it simply needs tweaks :) All input is appreciated.