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Emily Lockwood in Death of a Schoolgirl - A Perilous CYOA (S2.5) (Patreon)

Published:
2021-01-02 17:14:01
Edited:
2022-04-08 21:05:28
Imported:
2026-06
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This is a choose your own adventure where you play as Emily Lockwood. Take Emily on her most high stakes adventure yet to save everyone she loves and the town she calls home. There are dozens of different unique ways for her story to end, each ending is totally different and you get to choose where Emily goes and what she does!

Emily Lockwood has been all over the world, but the only thing she wanted was to be a schoolgirl again. Now she's finally back in Greenfield, her wish so close to coming true. But the perils of her past have followed her home. Reo's returned with a desire for revenge and a burning hatred for the famous girl detective that threatens to destroy everything she loves. This time Emily won't be able to run and hide. She'll have to face her greatest threat to save her town and the people she loves. She might get her wish to go back to school but death will be waiting for her.

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To see 'What Happened Next?' in four endings from this story click here - https://www.dropbox.com/s/98wgzebhpj70pnh/5.%20Death%20of%20a%20Schoolgirl%20-%20What%20Happened%20Next.pdf?dl=0

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bonesteoca

An exciting conclusion, I hope! Each one of these CYOAs mixes up the formula somehow, and this one sounds promising. I'm just glad you didn't go with a full Christmas-themed story. Somehow, I doubt that would've worked out as smoothly as Halloween!

spyrocyndersam13

I love this CYOA (SPOILERS) I haven’t done all the endings. The endings I got were amzaing and hilarious especially the one with Veronica Stone and Riko I love that we played as Lynda again. Riko’s return. Though how did she get hypnosis? Did she always have it? I really hope things get better for Emily. It’s horrible that she’s going to jail I hope that Riko is alive. Though since Reo isn’t dead does that mean he will return? So does this mean Lynda’s stories will be while Emily is in jail? Oh! And we finally get Emily’s father! And Tommy is working for him that’s probably why Tommy supposedly stopped being evil. Her father is probably why he started dating Emily especially becuase of the ending. This hints that her father might be evil. This CYOA was an amazing end to Emily Lockwood season 2. And I really want Season 3. I’m excited ^^

bonesteoca

I had a whole review posted as a comment here. What happened? Is it all right if I repost?

bonesteoca

SPOILER WARNING So I've been sitting on some thoughts about this CYOA for a bit. I wanted to make sure I'd mulled them over, because this adventure started out as my favorite, and honestly, the first act with Emily and her girlfriends sneaking through town to reach the school is the stuff of dreams. But the further in I got, the more my interest wavered, despite the solid prose, and fun set pieces. Seeing Riko team up with Emily and her friends was another delightful standout, just for how well those characters play off one another. But by the third act, I had mostly disengaged. And I think I've figured out why: Reo just isn't a compelling villain. I don't mean that in the way he's written, or acts. By all accounts, he's certainly dangerous, menacing, and effective. The problem is that he isn't a foil to any of our heroine's characteristics. If we look at Emily Lockwood, we see a dainty, nervous, feminine archetype, with a general deference to authority figures, and a budding sexuality. And the reason why Veronica, Eliza, Tommy, Diana, and Riko all make such excellent villains is because they embody each of those insecurities, respectively. When Emily succumbs to failure at their hands, it means she's succumbed to her own weakness, and incidentally, makes the game overs so wonderfully delectable. It also justifies why Emily is eventually able to make peace with them, once she's overcome those flaws. By contrast, Reo has no idealogical complement to Emily. In the last two CYOAs, one could've perhaps made the argument that he represents the strained relationship between Emily and her mother, and their mismatched views on how to deal with danger. But in this story, that's gone. Lynda confronts obstacles with the same creative problem-solving approach as her daughter, and even embraces her decision to save Greenfield Academy on her own. And that's fine, their arc has been told already. But when the overarching threat is a villain who, frankly, is more afraid of Emily Lockwood's ethos than she is of his, it significantly lowers the stakes of the sleuthing. Because now, when Emily loses, it's not a defeat. It's just a capture, usually by nameless, faceless henchmen with little to no personal investment. I mean, the final fail-state is just Emily getting unceremoniously neck-snapped, which doesn't hold a candle to the emotional weight of your other stories' fail-state conclusions. If you're looking for specific feedback, I'd have leaned way more into Emily's insecurities about leadership. That would've immediately set up a clear parallel between her and Reo, and brought the potential for all sorts of wonderful game overs where our heroine's choices led not only to her downfall, but her followers' as well, a fact she'd be made miserably aware of each time. And then the final game over could be something truly fateful, perhaps laced with that twinge of morbidity you seem fond of, like Emily and her friends getting strung up by their ankles and stripped/drowned/whatever, while the school is forced to watch. This is all just my take, though. Honestly, I'm happy to see you switching gears to another character for a change. Tomb-sleuthing is a whole other ocean of potential, and I look forward to see what degrading misadventures Ciara encounters!