Abyss 2.0 (Prototype induction) (Patreon)

I've recently been running through my old work and thinking about which spots are inadequate, which ones i'd like to rework, and nothing in my collection is Older than the abyss induction. Its literally one of the first hypnotic pieces I ever wrote and I've been using it a lot for my whole journey as a file creator.
So I essentially rewrote the whole thing.
I'm posing it to you all to give me some feedback, how do you think the abyss induction could be improved and do you think this particular attempt does a good job at it.