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The Fall - Chapter 16 & 17 (Patreon)

Published:
2018-01-31 21:22:38
Edited:
2018-02-15 20:41:04
Imported:
2026-06
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Here we are, with the long awaited update!

The start of Saber's corruption is upon us. I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it.

Of course, make sure to let me know your opinion in the comments. Feedback is always appreciated.

To be entirely honest I got a bit of help from a friend who'd like to stay anonymous. Thanks buddy.

Chapter 16 

Chapter 17 

Comments

Dragyr

Great Chapters! I can't wait to see the ending(s?) I remember you put the three different endings for the story. The way i see it, Shirou returns, gets captured, finds out what happened, not fully (the manipulations and schemes in the fall, for if he knew of those he would be quite angry), and loses hold of his humanity fully becoming a "sword" and thus seeks to do what swords do: kill. like everyone.

ichaichasennin

There will be three endings, yes. That much I can confirm.

Eternity Smut

Will Rin 'accidentally' discover her betrayal?

Eternity Smut

True love is accepting the Good and the Bad...Regardless of how bad it is. Which is kinda hard :p. Curious about saber's decision though. Why go for a human? A magus would have a lot more magical reserves. Sooner or later that fat man isn't going to be enough to feed her magical needs. Either she goes back to shady magus guy or find more 'men' to give her magical energy.

LordMarksman

That would be amazing :) That or perhaps Saber could discover Rin's affair and then both coming to terms they can't live without cock and then "Fall" into the never ending pool of depravity and sin:)

LordMarksman

Shoot accidentally clicked sent before I was done lol, point being great job with chapters IchaIchaSennin definitely looking forward to the end of February to find out what happens next:) Whether it's Rin delving more into being a "whore" or Howard further breaking Saber teaching her the joys of being a woman:)

Orion9137

Here I was getting upset that there was no Fall chapter yet and then you release a double feature. Many thanks for the work.

Eternity Smut

Y'know I find it funny that there's not beach omake or chapter yet. Everybody knows that porn or eroga has to have a beach episode full of chadsters somehow hahaha.

Memememe

She went for a normal human because she was concerned about letting a magus inside of her with her Magic Resistance bypassed, a necessity to absorb mana.

Memememe

A weird part of me is slightly annoyed by Gerald’s “just as keikaku’d” moment when Seibah fell into his trap anyways even though she went out of her way to mitigate it. That part’s mollified at Seibah nearly wrecking his shit without Rin’s intervention (though I wonder how Rin avoided alerting Seibah to her presence, considering Seibah’s Instinct and Rin’s lack of Presence Concealment).

ichaichasennin

Saber was pissed off and about to die. Also, she did notice there was someone else, she just couldn't turn around to see who it was.

Memememe

Right, fair enough. That said, I can’t help but feel dissatisfied by how easily Gerald gets into Seibah, and how the fat guy whose name I’m momentarily blanking on happened to be a conduit for Gerald super sex thrall web that just happened to exist. It feels a bit cheap because a lot of effort went into corrupting Rin, and the fat guy actually having all of his sexual skill come from magic is a bit disappointing. Plus the random chance that Seibah happened to be working for him and decided to go to him of all people. Oh well.

ichaichasennin

Ah. I thought I had implied it well that Howard was just an extension of Gerard. It's Gerard who introduced Rin to Howard, remember? I thought the Mana Network didn't require any foreshadowing. Gerard's Magecraft specializes in sex. A Mana Network seemed the most logical step a Magus with that skillset could have/want. Howard's skills come from practice. Gerard just gave him a few pointers. Howard is part of the network because Gerard sent a woman his way to ensnare him since he fucks a lot of other women, thus spreading the Network even further.

Eternity Smut

People might complain about the huge mana pool from the network but considering what FGO is doing. This is minor. Though the scene where Gerard wanted to make Saber learn the difference between making love and raw sex...it just feels that it's missing something. He kinda just went and have hard sex with her instead of slow and steady like lovers. Hard to make a comparison without an example.