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Re:Versal Chapter 1 (Patreon)

Published:
2018-02-15 20:39:49
Imported:
2026-06

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Right, since this Patreon is technically both for fanfiction and original stories it's high time I started post original stuff. 

This is my attempt at it.

Gamer Night and The Fall still take priority so I make no promises about update rates on this one. 

What is this story about? Well, it's about a guy who gets killed, but gets another chance at life by reincarnating into his younger self.

Sounds familiar? I bet it does.

Too bad though. He's the villain.

Give it a try if you feel like it. Right now it's only a teaser, but starting next month it will join the roster of my stories.

Chapter 1 


Comments

Loves2Spooge

Well, for starters, you should change 'being' to 'begin' and 'from' to 'for' at the beginning. The 'which I suppose is quite a lot' is a fragment. You don't need a 'to' before 'plummeting' and 'towards', and a comma after the 'hole in my chest' and one after 'plan was crazy'. I won't bug you anymore about the grammar and spelling since this is just a teaser and not set in stone. The load of ...shit, I can't remember the term, but it's used in situations like these where a bunch of information is given by a character to set a mood or setting, or just to tell about their past, motivations, etc. Morgan Freeman is famous for doing it. Anyway, it's definitely an interesting idea. I wish you luck on it.

Monstermash

Don't get it what's this from?

Monstermash
>>10179071

I meant why does he say this Sounds familiar? I bet it does. Too bad though. He's the villain.

Anonymous
>>10179071

I think he was referring to other stories, mostly Light Novels, where the Hero gets sent back in time to their younger self.

Jek

Although it sounds interesting, I'm afraid I'm not too into villain protagonists. Anyways, will you be putting it on FictionPress, Archive of Our Own, or both? It would be easier to get readers that way, but with the story in it's early stages you'll need more than just Patreon to gather attention... and it doesn't look like you've recently updated your Wordpress blog. May not sound appealing to me personally, but I still hope you get the attention your writing deserves!

SpectralTime

...Man, between this and The Fall, I sometimes worry that Fate/Gamer Night is a fluke experiment and that the bulk of your personal enjoyment and energy is directed a these kinds of "Bad Guy" stories. Aw well. Long as I get what I'm subscribed for, I can't complain.