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Patreon Update +14k words (98% Uriel's Branch) (Patreon)

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2025-01-12 03:49:21
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2026-06
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Hi guys, I was off by about four hours cause of irl errands lol

Because of them, and a change in the writing, the branch is still unfinished. It literally only has such a small amount left, but it annoyingly deals with alot of coding for something so small and i needa go to sleep so i can work in the morning.

Anyways, here you go!

https://cogdemos.ink/play/fatedflame/kaepatreon

Please enjoy you guys, and please tell me what you think if you can.

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Parson

Wait…. Does Uriel cheat in this rewrite 👀 ? Please say I’m wrong 😫💔❗️

Sariel

Welp. I'm never gonna get around to finishing that review doc, so here are bits and pieces of my thoughts on the overall demo including questions: a. Absolutely love the new additions and the progressive approach to the goddess's meeting with her champion. Pacing issues have been solved and the characters were given more depth than in the old demo, in particular Adelina. There were subtle hints on her not getting along or... having less than a stellar opinion on Otto, yet the reason was never disclosed (in the demo). Frankly speaking, she and Remiel are excellent specimens for a character case study. b. Heh. Seeing the nobles' hopes dashed, when the current crown prince shows signs of similar character to the Old King🤣. You thought he was his mother's son due to how he conducted himself pre-incident? c. I'm dissapointed the diss monologue against Uriel, was removed😢 d. It's nice to see more politics. The way you have integrated politics in the narrative, makes it more digestible for the reader. It feels much more natural too. The need to read supplement lore material to understand the world around MC is not necessary anymore. e. Always love to see more scenes with Aurelian. I think you could add an option for MC and Aurelian to spend time together just like the "spend time alone to be more princely" option. f. 1. Adelina's branch: Pros: A1. Lots of content A2. We meet Queen Khari and one of the ROs A3. Adelina's cunning and actual ability to dunk on 'em hoes, is shown rather than told. A4. The friendship between the queens has the potential to be mirrored by their children. The potential romance, friendship or rivalry between the two crown prince-princess/princesses will be interesting to see in the future. (The princess seemed quite lonely though) A5. Quite a nice surprise to see Adelina's reaction and decision to have MC actually be a spectator to the slave trader's gruesome execution. Heh. She's more similar to the Old King than she thinks (her ruthless, imperious and fiery sense of justice) Cons: A1. Besides the interaction with the princess, overall it was quite a linear branch in terms of choice outcome. Understandable though, as the outcome of the negotiations was preplanned. 2. Uriel's branch (again this is only bits and pieces of my thoughts) This was the most impactful and richest branch in terms of character development for MC (especially one with the outcast backstory) and in terms of continental and even global politics. Argent could become the future superpower of the world. Otto be careful. Argent will NOT bend to your will anytime in the future. Keeping it kind of brief here to avoid any spoilers for those who haven't read it yet. I definitely see the majority of the reader replaying this branch rather than Adelina's, in the future unless they are going to romance the princess. Questions: 1. Why do I see a correlation between "Was my womb a tomb" and the ominous sentence with an epic bg music about the goddess sending MC And their siblings to Adelina's womb? Were all of them destined to be birthed stillborn? Come on. That's too angsty even for you man. 2. Will you include anytime in the future, the current Belthean's enpress, Adelina's mother's POV of reading her daughter's letter and seeing the forelock of her grandson/granddaughter's black hair? This could be a nice addition in the future as an optional read or even as a side story for Patreon. 3. How much in detail are you planning to go regarding the slave trade and the issue of colonialism in the future? 4. Did Adelina have any issues with nobles underestimating or disrespecting her (in subtle ways ofc unless they wished to court death) right after her marriage? 5. What are Uriel's ambitions and vision for Argent in the next 20 or 30 years besides trade and naval military power? Cutting it here, but be prepared for more questions in the future😁

KingdomsAndEmpires
>>161397270

Love this, thank you!!! Thank you for your suggestions and the detailed feedback! 1) Only the eldest was destined to be stillborn. The beginning meme is only that, a meme i found HILARIOUS lol 2) That's actually a great idea! I'll put it in the ideabucket for once I reach 300k words for the new version since my current focus is updates updates updates. 3) For once, the child mc angle of KaE is coming to aid me instead hinder me: The decision we chose, or our lack of participation in influencing the meeting with Count Rageon, will reveal their consequences as we grow older through the years. We will hear of events, atrocities, triumphs, and gossip coming from the colonies. 4) Yes, she did. Hence the retreat to Emerald Vale and the precious short years with her husband and children. Also, this helps explain why Blackwall was Uriel and Adelina's destination once they returned to public life. It allows for their allies to make clear statements if they go visit them and send their children to Blackwall. 5) Uriel would ask, "is this a job interview???"