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Getting this out a little early since I'm hoping to take part of the day off tomorrow!

Enjoy this reworked Chapter 18! Happy 4th to my fellow USAers! MERRRRIIIICCCAAAAA!

*********A FEW RULES & REMINDERS:

Chapters will be dropping as Bryce completes them. That means anywhere from every 1 to 2 weeks on average, though sometimes waits may be longer.

Recall that these are rough chapters, with no editing other than a single pass-through as Bryce writes.

On a similar note, we are not asking for advice or corrections at this time. If Bryce wants feedback, we will certainly reach out, thank you! If you want to voice concerns or complaints about the chapter, you may now do so over on the Reddit discussion thread below! Notifications are turned off on those conversations, so they're a free-for-all now (within the rules of the subreddit, obviously)!

THE REDDIT THREAD

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NerdGinger

Happy 4th!!! Let's get reading!!

Steffen Spraggins

Does anyone know if Bryce has been in talks about a TV show or film adaptation? I'd love to see this story in any visual medium.

Steffen Spraggins

I appreciate the response! I'll just continue to imagine the story in my head for the time being. Happy 4th!

Josh Offsie

A great follow through on the initial “tossed” draft. I’m really enjoying how quickly we are getting exposed to the personalities of the different trainers.

Ridayah Ahnkhuatra

Oh this was SO much fun. Thanks for the fireworks show Bryce!!

Iron Akela

Damn!! That’s one hell of a chapter. And that new interface is interesting

Brandon King

He's gotta hit B0 after taking actual damage in this little scrap, right? RIGHT??!!😂 TFTC + Happy 4th Bryce and fellow User!

Lyssa

lol best 4th of July ever

Wraithmarked Creative

Hi Nivym, Please read the rules of these posts before making comments like these. You can go to Reddit to provide critical feedback, thank you. The WM team

Maria Klein

So the scrapped chapter was good but man this one was amazing!

Reaperess

Lmao that was brilliant! As someone who frequently has to deal with a dislocated shoulder, OW! At least an S rank speed and strength with pop that back in quickly and efficiently

Tom

I know he moved his spare hand to Salute, but for some reason, all I could picture was him using it to perform jazz hands while he said "Surpriiiiise"

Brian Cody

Can this happen instead? I love this idea

Tim Kilgore

Absolutely brilliant chapter! Thanks for all of that.

Amanda Jones

Uwwaaaa! So good! Better than fireworks!

Polaris

Big fan of this

Lyn Shirley

Triggering the users abilities speaking softer and quieter while concentrating on what is requested seems like an excellent way to eventually achieve voiceless commands to me. I love it.

Polyist's Apostle

This kid is a fucking idiot 🤣 🤣 🤣 I love it! tyftc!

RickVaughn14

“Surpriiiiiise, ma’am” has me dying right now😂😂😂

Nahar

Time for yet ANOTHER lecture on not over doing it

PapaJohn

Happy fourth, big B!!! So the next Laraunt that we get to meet is probably Salista if the pattern keeps up, yeah? Next chapter, Rei will almost undoubtably be rewarded with a B0 CAD for ending up in the medical ward conscious for once. Maybe we get some link stuff going on which leads to him having to keep a straight face around the scary people? The juices are obviously flowing and I want MOOAAARRR

Reaperess

"You can't just have your characters announce their emotions. No one does that. That makes me so angry."😂

Linda Thompson

Awesome redo, much better. He’s insane but he got his hit in, as said anything goes on the battlefield….

Carolyne

Ummmm, one arm/hand is dislocated and limp at this point... so a salute is possible, jazz hands not so much

Tom

I know, I was thinking of Jazz hands with just his one arm. Jazz hand sounds wrong though

Matsc

Hmmm, one question that the axed chapter posed I was really hoping would get answered: What happens if Rei is touching someone when he Steps? Oh well, perhaps it will get poked at in a future chapter. Either way, thanks mate!

Eric Edwards

I liked both versions put forth, but the redo is more inline with the technical rules governing the 'TS' ability at present. That said, I'm seriously interested in the enactment of the ' emergency medical protocols'. Seems like shido may take over an injured area or introduce nerve pain block for the user (Rei) to continue to fight. WICKED!!!

Eric Edwards

If recall serves me correctly, when Rei was training with instructor Brits after coming from sectionals. Brits had him in a restricted hold, Rei TS behind him. From this prospective Brits didn't shift with him, even though in direct contact.

Al Parks

Everytime he hits, and bounces off the reflective shielding I keep thinking Shido will adapt to a once per combat Omega ability to penetrate all shielding for one hit. Doesn't have to be a FDA hit, but just a solid hit to scare the opponent into thinking he can do it more than once.

Shan Sharif

Love the redesigned chapter! I liked the idea of stored charges but I think it’s a bit overpowered this soon definitely something I could see when he’s A or S rank. Also just love the what the from calist when Ray runs the other way for the hit on the lancer. It’s a good way to pivot that ya they fight best as a team cause there was the instinctual shift to allow for him to be in full blind side for it

Christine Stewart

Nah, the salute is much more in character. Military college, and Rei has been there long enough for a salute to be automatic for someone he respects. Awesome rewrite btw

PNB

He escaped Bretz's hold with it in book 2. But probably future TS version will let him take someone since the Viv anecdote mentioned that he jumps with others in the future.

AliWake

Has it been mentioned if there is a limit on the distance of temporal step yet? Imagine all the thrift shopping dates he can do if there is no limit haha.

Nz

When Rei first fought Aria she was 2 ranks higher than him. He went up from an E3 to an E4. Kalus is at least 3 ranks higher than Rei. Given the way Shido reacts I’d expect Rei to hit the Bs after sparing with his first S….

ProVVoke

That is exactly what Dyrk Reese was worried about. There's already a secret-squirrel squad of S-ranked users that use the threat of violence to keep other powerful users in line. Rei's teleportation is only line of sight right now, but if he gets to S-rank with it as it is, he could literally be uncontainable. And abilities usually get more powerful/useful as the users adapt to using them. I'm wondering if Rei and his squaddies will become powerful enough to overthrow the quasi-fascist government when it inevitably tries to subjugate them into another set of weapons/tools of state power and how that will interplay with the looming timeline for being defeated by the aliens.

Max V

It is the first time with an S that's been described, but it's also implied that he's worked with claire de soto who is an S as well

Scott

What do we make of the {TRUE} notifications at the end? Did Rei somehow make a true call?

Rasmus Salling

True damage, as opposed to artificial limitations.

Riyon Hutton

Dungeon crawler Carl is getting a webcomic so i wonder if that’s an option

AliWake

"only line of sight". You get that could be an insane distance already right? What I was meaning to ask is can he teleport across a room, field, from the top of a skyscraper to the bottom or to the edge of the horizon haha

Tim Kilgore

I'm just wondering how many other cads will become self-aware before it's all said and done? The link intreagues me.

James C

When will Rei move beyond C9?

Jake Lilletvedt

I don't remember which chapter but in one of the pre chapter quotes I think it was Viv that mentions how Ray and Aria "visit" her and Grant but don't bring souvenirs. She doesn't say it outright but she says something along the lines of it sounds like an awful way to travel" which to me implies he gets to the point where he can jump planets and maybe even whole systems and bring people with him.

Ivo

My best guess is.. this friday :)

Michael Scott

I’m excited for rei’s sister to get to Galen’s!

Scott

good guess!