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Man, busy days. The most dramatic thing is that I just put out another book, which you can find here:

https://www.amazon.com/dp/B0FSQPY5PN

This is the first book I've released since Amazon changed its algorithms, which generally slows down the ranking process (and is theorized to hurt smaller books). Thankfully, this book has reversed the previous entry's decline, actually selling a little better... yet the ranking is lower. =/ It could be that the ranking is a meaningless number, but the fear is that not charting as high will mean worse sales over the long term. It remains to be seen what will happen.

(It should go without saying that I'd love reviews from anyone who has read it, and if you want to grab the book, now is the best time. Thanks!)

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We've had over 1400 people fill out the TLS survey! If you want to vote for your favorite character or anything else, please fill it out:

https://forms.gle/SimoMjMdQoa5AvcE9

It will definitely stay open a while longer, but I'm not sure how long, as I intend to close it before the release brings in a new audience.

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The TLS release continues to draw closer... and Valve continues to stonewall me. It is now almost a month since I submitted the art pack DLC, and two weeks since Valve has said anything. =/ I don't want to launch TLS without it, so this is not great.

So when does TLS launch? I have a disinclination (this isn't set in stone) to launch near Halloween or in November, which leaves just two weekend dates: October 17 and October 24. The first would be next weekend, and still no word from Valve. The second... is I guess what I'm leaning toward. I don't know, this is all more uncertain than I'd like thanks to the long DLC delays.

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Speaking of release, I'm considering rewriting the description. Let's review, and also look at the new rating thanks to the surge in reviews:

(Thanks to everyone who has reviewed! Recently or years ago, they all count. ^-^ I'm also appreciative of everyone planning to review after the big launch.)

I've revised the trailer, screenshot, and library images... but not the text. I don't really like writing blurbs/descriptions: I consider myself bad at them, and the ones that others (authors, marketers, designers, etc) generally think are best are the ones I like least. The TLS description has stayed the same for years, but if there's a time to change it, I guess it's now.

I think the first clause is fine: it gives a basic description and tells the reader to expect twists instead of a conventional game. I don't know whether a description is the place to talk about trope reconstruction. And finally, the promise of "a lot of fun, sexy content" rings a bit hollow to me, given how I've lost nearly all hope in the field. Emphasizing the storyline and that choices matter might do more to attract the game's target audience. Prospective players will glance at various features of the store page before considering whether to try a game, and the other elements already communicate "sexy ladies are involved" well enough.

It may be unnecessary to state, but just to be clear: the description is not "for" me or current players, it should be calibrated to potentially interest new players, or accurately represent the game to people who won't play. I think it's likely possible to do better than this, but I'm unsure what changes I'd make.

EDIT: After workshopping some things, I have a new description on the Steam page. That said, I'd also like to update the "reviews" section beneath the main box - it isn't so important, but the current ones are ancient. If you or someone else has articulated some of the central selling points of the game, feel free to nominate a review to host there!

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Dragof2

Hopefully someone with actual experience in advertising beyond small dabbling could ring in on this with some actual authority, but primarily I would focus on different value elements. You want to convey that it's an adult game with sexy content, but what really separates it is that this is a complex rpg where choices matter like no other game. I *think* the group you want to grab are people who are interested in a complex fantasy rpg with strong elements of politics, economy, and philosophy, but wouldn't expect that from an adult game. So to my mind some kind of a sentence that is a giveaway that this is a complex rpg that could stand alongside games like New Vegas and Planescape. If you want to get really blatant some kind of connection to BG3 might not go amiss.

An_Insane_Rogue_AI

I agree that emphasizing the story's complexity over anything else in the quick blurb, I also feel that the subversion of tropes is fairly important to mention, if I was new I'd be hesitant to click it if I wasn't aware of the twists

sierralee

I'm glad that players want to compare TLS to games like those, but I think making the comparisons myself would seem presumptuous. This is what I'm considering now, BTW: "Explore a world torn between armies of lust and purity in which everything is more complex than it seems, deciding the fate of nations through might, politics, and finance."

sierralee

This is my new shot at things: "Explore a world torn between armies of lust and purity in which everything is more complex than it seems, deciding the fate of nations through might, politics, and finance." Only nods at the idea of subversion, but that's hard to communicate effectively in a short space.

An_Insane_Rogue_AI

I like it. I feel like the version of myself who'd never played any of your games and randomly came across it on Steam would be far more likely to click this description than the one in this post or the old one on Steam already.

guillaume nguyen

I hope we get a succint 'Brooms included.' at the end of the new description. No explanations needed for old players, and might trigger curiosity for new ones. Or, you could completely lean the other way and say sexy orcs are included, lol Nobody ever think to say that about their games XDXDXD

Kris Van Gucht

"A world where nothing is ever easy and no choice is ever perfect"

Dragof2

I do agree that it would be presumptuous. It's why I'd hope for a marketing expert to ring in. Marketing always seems unsubtle and presumptuous to me, but I'm not good at judging the line where it's effective. That blurb sounds great though! Certainly the sort of thing I would prefer personally over blatant curiosity baiting, even though it is still intriguing in context to being an adult game.

AchtungNight

Uh, I think wheelbarrows are more useful than brooms.