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Azrie

It was nice to see Edlyn be happy until she wasn't. Rip. Chapter was nice. Jax really is a battle junky though lmao.

Darkdragon

Haha love how Edlyn is still terrified of talking to Amelia

Superduck50

I feel like"he/she gritted their teeth" is overused in your writing, maybe some variety in how people show frustration would be good

Danijel Turina

I don't understand why Edlyn would be afraid of Amelia. Sure, Amelia is strong, but Edlyn is a cook; everybody with a combat class would always be stronger than her and could theoretically kill her on a whim, but that's not a valid reason to be scared of them. Maybe it made sense in the beginning when she wasn't sure how balanced and reliable Amelia is, but obviously nobody else is scared of her so it would be reasonable to conclude she's perfectly safe.

Actus

Amelieez nutz