DAY04.SCENE01 (Patreon)

Had a hard time outlining the fourth day of the story, because it will serve as the end of the 'prologue', and will be used to setup the rest of the story. The problem for me is making sure the storytelling does not feel too boring, since there is little sexual content or progression for this day.

I'm pretty happy with the current version of the first scene, but plan to do some more revising work on it of course. And if anyone has feedback on it, let me know. I'm afraid it's a bit too much about the swimming, but the good thing is that after this fourth day, it will generally be skipped. But I first need to show some of it, summarizing it in her diary from the start would feel strange.

Tried to give Paul his own character and way he speaks/behaves, hopefully I succeeded in that. Dialogue is always my weak point, trying to improve on it.

I hope you'll enjoy the interaction and playfulness between the girl and boy, let me know if you hav