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I've manage to finished 4 pages before the end of the month. I've to re draw entire rhys section and the comm take longer than I expected so sorry for the wait. I think I can finally end this chapter in the next 4 pages.

As always if you spot a mistake feel free to post in the comment.

Also thank you for another month of support!

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Arthur Yeung

@ibenz009 41 pages and counting ... that's a record! And here I thought Demon Lord Chapter 2 and Liquid Mercury Re was pushing it, at 29 and 36 pages respectively!

Obtuse

Drawing all the lines of the pull of the "fabric" of the latex demon must have been *murder* 😆

StarGazer

All it takes is one drop and she just wants more ^^

Rökkr Ragnarok

Fourth page panel two, Right Side, “are made from a lefe essence” I believe it should say “are made from the life essence” And “human essence are so yummy” doesn’t quite make sense… perhaps “human essence is so yummy” would be better?

D. B

wait did that go inside him?

Arthur Yeung

@ibenz009: All changes are in uppercase. Page 34: OI! Not bad for my first HOST! You’ve got QUITE THE strong body, lad! FIE ON YOU, FIEND! BEGONE FROM MINE BODY! WHOA, LAD! THAT’S NOT HOW YOU TALK TO YOUR NEW MATE! IN A FEW MINUTES, WE’D BE INSEPARABLE! Now shut up and get ready for the SQUASH! HAHAHA! That’s right, MATE. WE’LL PUMP YOU full of ESSENCE from YOUR FELLOW INQUISITOR! EHEHEHE, if you have any TRICKS up your sleeve, YOU’D BETTER use it now, Rhys. Your flesh will MELT INTO demonic mana. From that POINT ON, YOU’LL CEASE being human. And the only way forward is to become my cute DAEMONETTE/IMP/SUCCUBUS. Page 35: You can feel it , right, Rhys? The TIGHT/TIGHTENING leather is sealing your pact to me. My body! I can’t …! THAT ACCURSED DEMON IS PUMPING THAT FOUL THING INSIDE ME! MY FLESH … MY BONES! OH, HOW THEY MELT FROM INSIDE! MY CHEST! IT GROWS!? EEK! The leather! It PUSHES BACK AGAINST MY GROWING BOSOM! EEK! It also took my …!? The ENERGY’S COMING IN … AHHHH! I CAN’T THINK STRAIGHT! I SHAN’T LOSE MYSELF TO TEMPTATION! Page 36: Welcome to demonhood … DAEMONETTE/IMP/SUCCUBUS RHEA. Page 37: My body … it’s all ENVELOPED by this leather … IS MADE FROM THE LIFE FORCE OF A FELLOW INQUISITOR … HAHHAHA! NOW THAT’S HALF-DECENT! HOW’D YOU LIKE YOUR FIRST HUMAN TASTE, LASSIE? Silence, demon! ALL I FEEL IS DISGUST! I AM INQUISITOR RHYS! AND I SWORE AN OATH TO DESTROY/EXORCISE ALL DEMONS! ARE YOU SAYING ALL THAT RUBBISH WHILE MAKING THAT FACE? WHY AM I SMILING!? WHEN I THINK ABOUT THAT TASTE … I CAN’T STOP SMILING. I CAN’T IF I GIVE IN TO THOSE THOUGHTS! HUMAN LIFE FORCE IS SO YUMMY!

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Format: Original quote ↴ Modified quote with [notes] ↴ Modified quote without notes. Notes shown in [square brackets] Multiple possible modifications shown in {curly brackets / braces} ―――――――――― [Page 34] "Yo! Not bad for my first home! You got a quite a a strong body, lad!" ↴ “Yo! Not bad for my first home! {You’ve got / You have} quite a [Had way too many a’s here.] strong body, lad!” "Curse you monster! Get out of my body." ↴ “Curse you, monster! Get out of my body.” "Whoa! Lad that's not how you talk to your new roommate!" ↴ “Whoa! Lad, that’s not how you talk to your new roommate!” "In a few minute we'll be in- -separable!" [Showing line breaks here.] ↴ “In a few minutes, [plural] we’ll be in- separable!” [When using hyphens, usually the part of the word before the break has the hyphen. While the style used here (where the hyphen appears both before and after the break) is recommended by some style guides, the preferred method is to just avoid using the line-break hyphen when possible.] ↴ “In a few minutes, we’ll be inseparable.” "Now shut up and get ready for the juice!" "Mphf!!" "Kekeke! That's right, lad. We going to pump you full of life essence of your fellow demon hunter!" ↴ “Kekeke! That’s right, lad, we’re going to pump you full of the [This life essence is specifically from his compatriots.] life essence of your fellow demon hunters! [plural]” ↴ “Kekeke! That’s right, lad, we’re going to pump you full of the life essence of your fellow demon hunters!” "Fufufu, if you have any trick up your sleeve you're better use it now, Rhys." ↴ “Fufufu. If you have any tricks [plural] up your sleeve, you’d [You want ‘you should’, not ‘you are’.] better use them [plural] now, Rhys.” ↴ “Fufufu. If you have any tricks up your sleeve, you’d better use them now, Rhys.” "Your flesh are about to be melt into demonic mana. From that moment you will cease being a human." ↴ “Your flesh is [Flesh is uncountable.] about to melt into demonic mana. From that moment, you’ll [Contract] cease to be human.” ↴ “Your flesh is about to melt into demonic mana. From that moment, you’’ cease to be human.” [Page 35] "You can feel it right, Rhys?" "Mmmm... HAH!" "The tighten leather is sealing your pact to me." ↴ “The tightening leather is sealing your pact to me.” "Ahh!! My body!? Gah! I can't...! Stop it! That demon pump that foul thing into me!" ↴ “Ahh!! My body!? Gah! I can’t…! Stop it! That demon’s pumping [‘That demon is pumping’] that foul stuff [A matter of opinion; ‘thing’ and ‘stuff’ are both generic placeholders, but I find that ‘stuff’ is a better fit when the placeholder itself is uncountable, which in this case the mana, being fluid-like, is.] into me!” ↴ “Ahhh! My body!? Gah! I can’t…! Stop it! That demon’s pumping that foul stuff into me.” "It's melting my flesh and bone and remade me from the inside!" ↴ “It’s melting my flesh and bones [plural]. Remaking [present tense] me from the inside!” [In my opinion, this is a bit of an odd sentence regardless of grammar. It just doesn’t seem like the kind of thing someone would actually say.] ↴ “It’s melting my flesh and bones. Remaking me from the inside!” "My chest! It's growing!?" "Ekk! The leather! It's pushing back again my expanding breast!!" ↴ “Eek! The leather! It’s pushing back against my expanding breasts!!” "Wha...!?" "!? Ekk! It also took my...!?" ↴ “!? Eek! It also took me…!?” "Eeek! Gii!!" "The energy coming in ahhhh! I can't think straight! I can't let myself lost in this temtation!" ↴ “The energy’s coming in ahhhh! [I don’t know what this sentence is trying to even say, to be honest.] I can’t think straight. I {mustn’t lose myself to this temptation / can’t let myself become lost to this temptation}.↴ “The energy’s coming in ahhhh! I can’t think straight. I {mustn’t lose myself to this temptation / can’t let myself become lost to this temptation}. [Page 36] "Welcome to Demonhood." "Demonette Rhea." "Hah! Hah! Ah...ah no!" [Page 37] "My body..." "It's all cover by this leather. I look just like Fang." ↴ “It’s all covered by this leather. I look just like Fang.” "And this woman body..." ↴ “And this woman’s body…” "Are made from a lefe essence of my fellow demon hunter." ↴ “…is [singular] made from the [specific] life essence of my fellow demon hunters. [plural]” ↴ “…is made from the life essence of my fellow demon hunters.” "Kekeke! Now that's half-decent demon look!" ↴ “Kekeke! Now that’s a half-decent demon look!” "How do you like your first taste of human lassie?" ↴ “{How’d / How did} [already happened, past tense.] you like your first taste of human, lassie?” ↴ “{How’d / How did} you like your first taste of human, lassie?” "Silence demon!" ↴ “Silence, demon!” "The only thing I felt is disgusted! I'm Demon Hunter Rhys and I swear an oath to destroy all demon!" ↴ “The only thing I felt is disgust! [You want the noun here, not the verb.] I’m Demon Hunter Rhys, and I swore [Already happened, past tense] an oath to destroy all demons! [plural]” ↴ “The only thing I felt is disgust! I’m Demon Hunter Rhys, and I swore an oath to destroy all demons!” "Heh!" "Are you really saying that all that crap while making that face?" "!?" "I'm smiling? Why I'm smiling! When think about that's taste I can't stop smiling." ↴ “I’m smiling? Why am I [‘am I’ and ‘I am’ are two different things.] smiling! When I think about that taste, I can’t stop smiling.” ↴ “I’m smiling? Why am I smiling! When I think about that taste, I can’t stop smiling.” "I can't if I give in to those thought!" ↴ “I can’t give in to those thoughts!” [I presume the ‘if I’ was originally for something (‘I can’t [stop] if I give in those thoughts’?), but as-is, doesn’t make sense.] "I...I.. will never come back..." "Ah....ah human essence! Are so yummy!" ↴ “Ah…ah human essence! {Is so yummy / So yummy}!”

Corington

A great update to end the month with!

Alexey Stratulat

Great work as always. I wonder if you're already thinking about ideas for the next comic?