Opinions wanted (Patreon)

So, I am trying to come up with the story to work on after Threads and the collaboration with Dakota Krout.  I am going to occasionally post story ideas here to see what you guys think.  I will use the best ones to pitch to Mountaindale for contracts, to see which ideas they are willing to publish.  

One idea is a superhero LitRPG about a regular guy who falls in love with a superheroine.  To stay with his lady love and their daughter, he enters into an experimental project that gives regular people super powers.  It would be an action/comedy thing, similar to Deadpool.  This is a sample:

Defenestration.  Such a fun word.  Fun to say, fun to write, and even fun to read.  You should try it.  Say defenestration out loud.  It’s fun, right?  Just rolls off the tongue.  Unfortunately, it is not a fun activity to take part in.  At least, the receiving end of it.  For those of you who don’t know, to defenestrate someone means to throw them out a window.

Time was temporarily moving in slow motion for me, dragging out my exciting and sudden trip from the inside to the outside.  The thoughts flashing through my head as I was flying through the air, shards of glass glittering in the sunlight around me, were mostly about the decisions that brought me to this point.  Thinking them over, I wouldn’t change anything.  That didn’t change the fact that my coming impact with the ground was going to hurt.  And it also didn’t change the fact that I was going to get back up and march right back inside to kick some serious ass.  Bum.  Needed to keep curse words out of my vocabulary, even in my own head.  It made it less likely I would say them around Rebecca.  She couldn’t talk yet, but it was good to get in the habit now.  No one wants to teach their kids curse words.  Especially me.  But I am getting ahead of myself here.  I should probably start from the beginning…