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2020-11-18 02:41:32
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Hi all!

So, here's 5 versions of the same image. These are intended to be the "pleasured" closeup, shown when the character is reaching orgasm.

I liked the initial black-and-white sketch, but I feel that the various final versions could maybe use a bit of adjustment. 

I've given some feedback to the artist already, but I won't repeat it here so as not to influence your opinions. What do you think of these, and what changes (if any) would you suggest? 


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GoodQuestion

Honestly this is the first bit of shared art that I've really liked.

RevolverJ

I really can't find anything negative in these pictures. Good stuff

Sentimental Penguin

Yeah, the black and white sketch seems better. I think having the tongue sticking out makes the difference?

Sentimental Penguin
>>47919422

Also I think it's also because the colored art falls in a weird uncanny valley between realistic and stylized, while the sketch is definitely more stylized/anime style?

Dunan Rayne

I have a few questions. So who's the protagonist? Is the main character male or female? Is the main character customized by the player? boob size, butt size, penis size, eye color, body type, skin tone, hair color, personality, virginity, etc... Does the player have a solo character? Or we have multiple characters like FF? I prefer a solo character. 👀 And your second project is VN Game? Or is it a game with elements of play like RPGM? I like well-made nonlinear VN games like New Life, but I hope there will be a play element (like RPGM) in your second project.

robin

imo the 3rd ones better as far as the body goes but i kinda like the expression on the black and white pic more? for 1 2 4 and i guess 5 the spine is just. too long so it throws me off- if her expression could be changed a bit in the 3rd one itd be the best overall

Sentenal

I think the second one is overall the best. The 1st one has her head sort of being cocked to the side which is kind of weird, the 2nd one fixes that issue, the 3rd one looks fine but I think a porn scene should show off her boobs more, the 4th one probably has the best expression but again, not enough of her boobs showing.

rcd1976

The art work is great, I like 1 best. The only thing I might suggest is if you aren't going to give us a better idea of who is doing the pleasuring or how ( ie showing the lower half of a male body pressed against her buttocks, or someones head (face obscured by her buttocks), maybe crop the picture just after her sacrum.

splendidostrich
>>47919422

Thanks! So, you think something like number 3 but with some facial adjustment and maybe the head tilted upwards a bit more?

splendidostrich
>>47919779

The MC can be male or female, but the initial version of the game won't have much if any sexual content for a male MC, at least not while they remain male. This is something I'd like to explore more in later development but I had to keep the budget under control in the early stages so it needed to be pushed back. The player can choose an image set from the ones available. They'll be able to choose some traits but these do not affect the image. Game Two is not a VN - it's an RPG following the PC's career as an adventurer. It isn't RPGM-style though. You'll get more details when it's coming close to release, but that'll be a long way off.

splendidostrich
>>47924304

Thanks for the feedback... In fact, one of the drivers behind the change in position between 2 and 3 was that I asked the artist to show her nipples in the image - it felt like a bit of a tease to have them just out of frame. It seems that opinion is split between people who prefer 1/2 and those who like 3 best. I'll most likely go for an adjusted version of 3 as that's the latest, but there'll be a other characters so I'll see about getting one of them closer to the 1/2 style.

splendidostrich
>>47949528

Thanks! I don't think this is a huge issue in this case because there'll be another art element superimposed over the top-right for the penetrative parts of sex scenes. There will be some places where the text and art aren't fully in agreement - for instance if the text describes her lover pressing down on her shoulder blades. That's unavoidable for a game like this though, where the images have to be used in a bunch of different encounters.

Sentimental Penguin
>>47919422

Yeah, number 3, and maybe move the hair a bit to give us a better look at the woman's face? I know it's less realistic, but I think a more stylized look would be better/hotter.

Dunan Rayne
>>47919779

That's great. I prefer a female protagonist anyway. Actually, I want you to focus only on female protagonist.

Wim

Nice art, 1 and 3 are my personal favourites. Though the best (imo) would be body-position from 1 and face from 3...