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Tifa Creamed on the Bar - Commission (Patreon)

Published:
2020-07-11 16:34:06
Edited:
2020-07-11 16:38:57
Imported:
2026-06
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This is a image type I was unfamiliar with called a "0 to 100" sketch where is goes from something simple and mundane too full bore fucking. 

Nice to do something a little different ^_^ and hope you like it too!

Much love,

Director. 

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OuthaulDagger

Great images, as always. However, to be honest, I think the dialogue could use some work. It doesn't quite read well enough. E.g. 'Hold it!' is a little weak. And the second line could be a little easier to read. Try "That's your last drink tonight. I don't need you getting crazy again." It has the same meaning, but is easier to understand. as for "im cumming"; it feels like you could go a different direction. I don't mean to insult - I love your work. Just some constructive criticism. If you need inspriation for dialogue, I recommend 'The Cummoner' comic online. The dialogue is really well written. I love everything else about this commssion btw. Keep up the good work.

Firebox Studio

No problem, side note it was not my wording. mine would of been so much worse xD.