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Clean, black lines and dialogue! I didn’t include my first pass which had too much dialogue. My position on talkative TFs is that I don’t like them, because they lean too much on trite show-don’t-tell violations. (“I-is that… A TAIL?!?!”) I was conflicted here because Winifred is the kind of person that wouldn’t shut up while being turned into a pig. The problem is that the idea of one’s voice being replaced with animal noises sounds good in my head, but it doesn’t come across in writing nearly as well. Like, you could snort that W sound in the word “someone.” Try it now, I won’t tell anybody. But in writing, I had to settle for the infinitely clumsier “someWHOINK.” But y’know, this is a pair of word balloons, not the Great American Novel. I won’t sweat it, much in the way that pigs don’t sweat.

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PTCardinal

I agree, the less dialogue the better when it comes to sequences like this. Let the transformation and facial expressions do the talking!