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Since the poll is no longer ongoing, I can post the intermediate versions without worrying about the incomplete work affecting it.

I think Liora's pose appears a bit too sexy for the story start.

UPDATE: Deniis addressed my concerns with an update to the sketch. One version that's a bit more held back with the arm at the mouth, the other a bit more open. I'm happy with both of them, so I will be making a quick vote (1 Day Time Limit since it's not a major difference.)

Version A

Version B

Rean also moved a bit closer here to make it easier to represent smaller dick sizes with progressing illness at the later stages.

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Nayrael

I like what Deniis is cooking! I think it fits her that she looks sexy. The mix of sexual experience and a leader personality should lead to that. Her innocence could instead manifest in fondness of vanilla sex, with Edgar traching her to enjoy spicier stuff. Personally I'd also like it if she turned into a Dominatrix in the end, as I think it would go well with her leader persona, but that is probably contrary to the vision (maybe could work as a special ending if she starts beating Edgar in contracts while highly corrupted).

Beta The Slave

I also think it looks great. Maybe having a less self confident expression would make the difference for the story start? Either way, it looks like a good style

Beckendwarf

I’d agree, the underwear she’s currently wearing and the expressions seem a bit too sexy for the beginning. It also begs the question, how big is Rean going to be? Is it going to be a major comparison with Edgar? But in regard to Liora, I think it is a bit too sexy for the baseline. The position also seems to… active? If she’s prudish, would missionary or something more basic be better? Edit: I love version A. It feels less open, less sure of herself when it comes to sex. It’s also a good showing of how corrupt she can become, from this almost shy and embarrassed pose to something much more daring

Nayrael

But even if it does get decided that she looks too sexy, the CG can be used for a future scene. So again no problem IMO.

aura-dev

Note: I was mostly referring to things like the pose (lifting up leg), expression, body language in general, and the not-very-plain underwear. I think Liora's curves are fine as they are.

Nayrael

I like Version A, it makes her seem cuter, shier, more loving, and more corruptible

Neirod

Version A is shier but version B shows more inexperience. Personally I like more ver. A but I think ver. B fits more.

Buster4MC

Someone cooked here. A for me, but both are great!