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https://pleasurebonbon-next.com/comics/volume/1/page/56/

The next page will be very different from PBB Legacy. I believe you will like it!

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Erold

Well done, Vanessa! Among other things, more character for Dalila and Hans is a welcome change :)

L. D. C.

Sempre ottimo, il tuo lavoro: ma non posso aspettarmi di meno da un'artista come te!😉 Nel frattempo ti auguro sempre il meglio per il tuo papà e ti faccio il mio più caloroso in bocca al lupo per tutto. Se posso contribuire ancora con la tua Amazon Wish list fai un fischio! Good vibes to you! 🍀

Jazzyman

Yeesh he's losing it. Delila setting him straight with a hard drink.

Silvador

I hope that wasn't an expensive bottle. Minor critic: the first speech bubble looks like the guy in the panel is talking. I would've left the little arrow off that first speech bubble; that way, it would've been more clear that it was someone else speaking.

Kanbe Namura

It finally happened. XDDD And it was worth the wait. lol Also that was an interesting fact about Hans. O.O Thank you very much for the hard work you put into this page, Vanessa! :DDDDDD It was truly amazing and I am looking forward to the next page. X3

VanessaSan

I thought about it too, yours is a good comment. But in the final I didn't do it because I'm obsessed with character placements. Hans is facing right, points the stool in that direction, so it is the direction in which william is standing. So the balloon's arrow had to come out from the right, according to hans' position and gaze, in my ultimate opinion. Being the first dialogue, the baloon had to go left. Also because he would have obstructed the dialogue of dalila, always placed on the right. So what to do? I can fix it but I am not sure. The first balloon have to remain in the upper left, as a matter of reading order, but the arrow, in your opinion, would have suggested that the character was on the left? And therefore not in line with Hans gaze and stool?

Silvador

The arrow gives the impression that it is Hans speaking, because it is pointing towards him. It's common practice to have no arrows on a speech bubble, when someone is talking that isn't visible in the panel. Because the reader already knows William and Hans have been talking, a bubble without an arrow would let the reader know it is probably William talking.