Story question (Patreon)

How does this sound:

Viewer browses through a tinder like app (but it's set in equestria/ponyville) and comes across shy.

Scene changes to a restaurant where you meet up with her, and a mini date sort of starts. As time progresses shy drops an item carelessly and asks viewer to retrieve it under the table, where after doing so shy quickly reveals her goods to the viewer (the table has cloth on it so the entire thing is covered, a high end restaurant). This leads her into giving a viewer a blowjob under the sheets in the restaurant (with perhaps viewer talking to server mare wondering where your partner went), before progresses into you going to her cottage and more sexy times happening.