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It won the Poll for One Extra Chapter Last Month.

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Comments

Erinnyes

I admit this one is starting to lose me because it feels like the story has just turned into “tour of everywhere and how much massively better it is than England to an absurd degree for no obvious reason” while the actual plot has slowed to a crawl. The world is super cool, I love the characters, Itisa is a joy, and I really want to see the story succeed, but I felt like that had to get pointed out.

Drinor

I think you are right. I think I'm slowing down the story a lot with all of these. There is nothing wrong with exploring the magical world, but way too many chapters focus on that. I will speed up the pacing and make sure we reach Year 3 Story within two chapters. I think the next chapter will finish the Italy Visit. Chapter 96 will finish the Russian Visit, and with Chapter 97, we are back in Hogwarts and the Start of Year 3, and also the start of everything slowly going wrong.

Kuronokishi

Wow! Beautiful chapter!!! The Photo of the Italian School is absolutely stunning!!! :-))) Now, Harry is on the path to heal Astoria and reform the healing practice in the Britain. In addition to talisman making, Harry will become a healing researcher!!! Plus, I have a gut feeling that this girl has fallen for Harry. House Potter will spread across all countries. :-))))

Konner Human DBZT

Shouldn't harry have also thought of Sebastian and his sister when he saw the healing ward?

Hadrian v.E.

Same. The story is just so meandering at this point. The primary focus should be on Harry building enough economic, political, and magical (seriously, can he actually do anything without first crafting a talisman?) power to stand secure.

Konner Human DBZT

Yea not even thinking of them was a bit odd to me

Kuronokishi

I wonder what curse was used to attack Lorenzo, the brother of Signorina Veronica Lombardi. Was it Arvada Kedavra? Or another killing curse. If it was Avada Kedavra, then, Harry's talisman has proven to counter killing curse. All person needs is Talisman, and healing support to survive it. Also, if Signorina Veronica Lombardi is daughter or niece of prime minister of Italy, then, Harry has indirectly saved the life of someone very important to the present prime minister of Italy. It is a good chance, the prime minister unofficially introduced her daughter/niece as potential partner for Harry. Establishing informal connections is part of diplomatic strategy. I hope this beautiful red head Italian lady will play a role in Harry's life. Maybe, as a Italian spouse, a lover, a fiance, or maybe as a teacher in Hogwarts. :-))))

Mr Cyberpunk

Can't wait for this Harry to meet Remus and tie himself into more of a anxiety knot about how will he help the man with his lycanthropy.