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And while I'm at it... (Patreon)

Published:
2022-10-18 03:00:31
Imported:
2026-06

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I'd also like to ask how my writing is in general.  I had some external feedback on the "In The Moment" story where someone, who hasn't read my stories before, had a critique on the way the story was written - the chaotic structure in certain parts.  Incomplete sentences and such.  A valid critique, honestly.

It's something I've kind of sort of worried about in the past.  I like to do it to try to create a tense moment (stressful to the reader) and to also show the character's mind fracturing as well as to tweak the narrative in some cases and break it up.

But, if it's annoying, I'd also like to know that in case I need to stop.  I'm not a trained writer.  I just make up what I'm doing so it'd be good to know if it's not landing with the readers when I use that type of writing.  Or to know if any of my other writing habits aren't working well.

Thanks!  You can also DM me on Discord or here if you're not comfortable making a public comment.

Comments

Tama_the_Enfield

I like your writing style. Personally I am a fan of your snake and werewolf stories most (though it might be cool to see more bird ones. I think the moments of chaotic fracturing are pretty well presented by the way. You really get into and display your characters mind in my opinion.

Tag Zedawg

I love your writing! It's fucking hot and often has a compelling story. Just keep it up!

Daniel Lopez

I think your writing is superb. You have a unique way of writing that really does make a story pop.

Telv

While you could also handle scenes like that with a calm and composed narration, that style tends to read more like observation notes - which does not seem like the right choice for this story. If following the "incomplete" and "chaotic" writing itself presents an issue I'd suggest practicing to read. Even with dyslexia that one was fun to read.

Krockerdile

I really like your work, but I think sometimes the continuity does get lost a bit in the chaos, which can be a bit jarring. That being said, I throughly enjoy your work, especially the large group spread, which I know is very difficult to keep straight and fresh for each transformation.

Mooran

I like the occasional bit of confusion. Makes the first person more real feeling

AlecWhitacreVO

While I enjoy reading the general smut story every now and then, as an asexual person (demisexual to be precise) it does get tiresome to have almost every story devolve into breeding kink and sex parties, I'd be interested in to see your skills in various ways if not just to broaden the depth, the under the dying star story as others have pointed out was amazing in its own way, very novel, and I know you're very talented in writing and I'd love to see you take it a step further, perhaps in a medieval way, maybe perhaps a Priestess (think Vicar Amelia from Bloodborne), or a warrior out on the field of battle calling upon a family worshipped diety, clichés be damned, a good story is a good story, but I'm also just a subscriber, and my thoughts could very well be a minority and I'm okay with that, but that's my two cents on this matter.

Telv

May I ask why you subscribe to an erotica Patreon page in the first place?

AlecWhitacreVO

Nobody writes TF like Mark, that's just a fact

markgraham

I'm afraid nearly everything I write is going to be erotica. Some with more story content than others but all slathered in smut. About the only time that won't be the case is if a non-erotica story suggestion wins a poll or I have an amazing idea for a non erotic story. It's what the Patreon is built for and what people pay for primarily.

markgraham

Do you have a story in mind where its clear that the continuity gets lost? Just so I have an example?

markgraham

I think it's a valid argument from the reader. Probably just jarring for them if they're not used to it or expect it. Or if their brain just doesn't like the cadence and layout. I certainly don't blame them. I just wanted to see if it was something I needed to stop doing.

markgraham

That is so incredibly kind of you to say! Thank you so much :)

markgraham

Noted! And thank you for taking the time to reply. Means a lot to me.

markgraham

I'm really glad to hear that it can work with the way I've presented it, thank you! I'm sorry I don't do a ton of snakes. Non-furry critters aren't quite so easy for me to work on. I just hope the ones I do have are good.

Krockerdile

One of my favorites, Primal: The Alpha. Early on you stated the Asian woman got off the stage, and then after the major changes, she is set upon in stage. Minor, but I went back to check I hadn’t read it wrong. Got to say, I love that story.

Nothingman

Most of us are here for Lycandope's brand of erotica TF "kink." I think you can get the kind of stories you are asking for anywhere for free.

Nothingman

I do like the sort of breaking off of sentences your characters do sometimes when in the throes of change!

Mooran

Very good. Smooth writing, good flow. Well paced and non-repetitive, which is hard to do with this subject matter.