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Being Fiona 433 (Patreon)

Published:
2026-07-06 04:49:56
Edited:
2026-07-09 03:42:20
Imported:
2026-07
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I kind of like the idea that Jess is pouring out her heart and using her anxieties about her inability to date Craig to build a fake story about what dating Craig might have looked like for her if she had tried it; and Felix oblivious about Jess' crush is simply excited about how well Jess is able to spin her false explanation of past events.

Also, I finally got around to finalizing the shading on 429.

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As writer, I'm so impressed that you constructed what feels like a truly new innovation in dialogue. Just thinking of how much you had to write to converge to this scene. The setups! And having it all make sense. Wow. That's all I can say. Wow.

RobinHarper

Can I ruin the magic and say that it was just blind luck? And that after adding in the Jess is Fiona twist, all these pieces just accidentally fell into place?

D

In my experience of creative writing I think I can safely say that writers "paint themselves into a corner" regularly and the usual solution is to say "well I'm going to have to throw out X chapters and rewrite". Then inspiration hits (when it does) and a solution is found. And we move on to the next seemingly intractable problem. I believe all art forms are, in their essence, problem solving exercises. In your case, you found a door in your "corner" and proceeded to the "next room" carrying us with you. I'd take the W and lean into the fact that you did it and it works. I've done some further thinking about what to call this... maybe "collaborative dialogue", but in your case it's more than that. Some examples. In "All of Me", Steve Martin was physically split into two people, largely for physical comedy and the joy of him arguing with Lilly Tomlin. There are news and sports examples of a person giving dialogue to character through an earpiece, but that's not the same. I'm rewatching "Westworld" series and there's a lot of bifurcated minds and forced (by programming) dialogue. There's many adjacent analogues, but you're solution feels unique. Part of my enjoyment of various Patreon writers/artists is experiencing the innovation and narrative solutions. Your work exemplifies some of the best. So thank you.

DJ Frazier

Felix's last text bubble reads: "I mean, I did say I was worried about how taking further would change things!" It feels like at least one word is missing from this - "worried about how taking further would change things!" doesn't sound right. Best offer for a fix would be: "I mean, I did say I was worried about how taking it further would change things!"