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EDIT 10/21/23 @ 8:45AM EST: Some changes were made to the chapter, as after a re-read and some feedback, I realized it wasn't up to par. I'm adding this and informing you in case it matters to you. The changes are mainly in the beginning and end.Zamn.

Borne of Desire Ch 16 is ready Help Edit: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uzwdAMmEisP2W_95QKXzo1tmhvdg28LN/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=116303056270228689575&rtpof=true&sd=true Read Only: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1fo15Vo_N5_Qd9l57wZt4PWnrK1p-_g-Z30btbbAxAuo/edit?usp=sharing

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Zach

Hell yeah that's some good shit brother!!

BelligerentGnu

Small thing: as far as I know, experienced fighters watch their opponents center of gravity, not their limbs. All movement starts there. Aside from that, cool new teammate!

Shisui34

Love that I can’t wait for more of this story. I like this one the most.

Nitrous_Hail

Love the changes! they really add to the chapter

Bacu

Amazing chapter! Though I have a few small gripes about it. Spoiler warning! ... Julian and Lulu didn't actually learn anything from this encounter, well, maybe except the fact that pokemon also can become dejected about relationships. When the fight came, I kind of felt like everything that happened is what would happen in an anime too, it didn't force our protagonists to go out of their comfort zone and thus the importance of the battle is just reduced to 'proving croagunt wrong'.

Phoenix Bugg

I love this much more now with the new additions and I can't wait for the next Borne of Caution!

Nets Pulse Podcast

I do feel like Julian and Lulu learned a lesson through a simple strategy bringing them so close to defeat. I think the real growth will happen now that Croagunk is on the team. There is less urgency to the situation so they’ll spar together and discuss strategy. This is simply my opinion which, of course, could be proven wrong immediately in the next chapter lol