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This would've been from the Eating Mac And Cheese night from last year. Nothing specifically was wrong with it, but I just thought it... exceeded the rate limit for that particular storyline. Maybe it'd find a moment with a bit more oxygen for it later. And it did!

But back then, this strip replaced it, going in a slightly different direction.

 

One small issue with the unused strip was it needed to have Walky-in-relation-to-Dorothy mentioned so the moment was set up, and it does that very quickly, but it's... very quickly. One benefit of the "I could take that guy better'n Walky" punchline from today's (4/19) published strip is that it puts Walky into the discussion, vis-a-vis a relationship with Dorothy, so it's not so much of a scrambling trip to get to where we need to be in the next strip. Joyce is already thinking about Walky+Dorothy, so she doesn't have to assemble those pieces in one panel.

The original strip ending where it does, with Joyce's line, hits differently! It's a slightly different kind of punchline, and the published version ending instead with Dorothy's suggestion of drinking water makes it a marginally different joke. I'm not sure either is superior to the other in a vacuum, but the drinking water panel suits the overall narrative here better, so it's better in the moment, I think.

The final:

 

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Andrea Andrew

So the original strip had more of Dorothy actually acknowledging Amber and Lucy as still Walky’s potential love interests and made Joyce even more LGBTQ. Nice.

Pangab

Confirming my theory that that’s an autistic rather than drunken thought considering Joyce would still say it stone cold sober

Seth Aaron Hershman has they/she pronouns

I think the original was paced better on a panel-to-panel level. I miss the alternating Dorothy and Joyce panels. Shifting to that in the back half of the published strip feels cramped.

Sajuuk-Khar

Huhhh. Maybe I’m in the minority, but once again I like your decisions best, good Willis. Don’t get me wrong, Joyce’s urge for hot goss is fun and all and it’s wonderful to see this would totally still come out sober, but like… It doesn’t feel right, to me, to have done it then. It’s much more organic in the final product, the vibes are perfect, the social event is lubricated, the gals are pals.

darklion

the present moment has a bit more ethanol, too. combustible.

Anna K

By "even more LGBTQ", do you mean the double-entendre of "in your closet"? I can't see much other difference, though I was wondering why it changed to drapes in the final version.

J. Steven York

Suddenly wondering how much of Dorthy's confused sexuality is tangled up in her political ambitions and fears that it wouldn't be accepted by voters? Is putting that on pause the key to getting herself figured out? Nah. We can't make anything that easy because: comic. :)

Madam Mango

That is exactly what I was thinking!