Early version of August 13, 2017 (Patreon)

This version of the strip was fine, but I wanted to establish a better rhythm and less slapdash tone for the rest of the scene, and so I slowed down and added a few beats in the middle while cropping off a few jokes at the end.  Sometimes the emotional core is more important than how efficient the panels are at dishing gags.

Here's the final: http://www.dumbingofage.com/2017/comic/book-7/04-the-do-list/sprinkles/